Child of Mine

my fragile flutterby
skirts the fringes of
future farewells

oblivious and unafraid
a surface of too close
for comfort burns bright

may the breath of
past spirits lift her wings
to grant her peace

Reviews

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

Your poem was really beautiful! The way you described the fragile flutterby skirting the fringes of future farewells was so evocative and poignant. It was like you were conveying a sense of vulnerability and uncertainty. The line about the surface of too close for comfort burning bright was especially powerful - it was like you were describing a sense of danger and risk. The image of past spirits lifting her wings to grant her peace was so lovely - it was like you were conveying a sense of hope and comfort. Overall, I thought your poem was really well written and thought-provoking.

[Chris Shaw]

Your review is beautiful and I thank you so much for the thought and attention you have given me today. This poem is especially dear to my heart and encompasses much love.

Chris

[Relic]

"Future farewells," that says a lot. A responsible mother who has lost a child never forgets. That scar runs too deep. I'm sure she's in eternal peace. I love short but powerful poems. Great one, Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Motherhood ain't always easy Tim. Hardest job I've ever had and unpaid too. Thanks for stopping by.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the sentiment is so strong here...and I do hope she finds peace.
I love the line "my fragile flutterby"---
I conjure up quite the image with that one.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear J. I wish her both strength and peace.

Chris

[samparks,sam]

Nice feelings nice poem I like too much Every word have meaning full sense

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much for stopping by today. I appreciate that very much

Chris

[samparks,sam]

why you stopping tday

[Chris Shaw]

I'm not stopping. I thanked You for
calling on my page :)