Beth is a very lucky young woman indeed .. I am sure she will learn quick, after all, she has an excellent mentor ....................................... it wasn't that many years ago I scribbled something very similar for my own petite fleur, who married this very June :)
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2 Years Ago
How lovely Neville. A family wedding and I bet you did a grand job of giving your daughter away. Ma .. read moreHow lovely Neville. A family wedding and I bet you did a grand job of giving your daughter away. Ma petite fleur is recovering well from her heartbreak. She now thinks he was a tosser and I am inclined to agree with her :)
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Bleeding butcher red drops of love blood! You're killing me! Your granddaughter cried on your shoulder and you wrote this about her experience? I like that use of poetry. Let someone know you understand by expressing it in song. I hope she can clean up the mess and all that blood doesn't stain her life.
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2 Years Ago
Her heartbreak is raw. She lives with us so we witness first hand her upset and that is uncomfortabl.. read moreHer heartbreak is raw. She lives with us so we witness first hand her upset and that is uncomfortable. All part of life's rich tapestry Bill. She will learn from this experience. Thanks for your thoughts.
Absolutely true. We grow stronger where we break :)
2 Years Ago
Isn't it the middle of the night over there? Shouldn't you be dreaming right now? Dreaming up dreamy.. read moreIsn't it the middle of the night over there? Shouldn't you be dreaming right now? Dreaming up dreamy words dreamt in lucid dreams!
2 Years Ago
Eleven hours ago it was 10.00 pm, so not the middle of the night :))
Oh, but the first heartbreak is the worst. You think you will never get over it and you swear you will never love again....but you will. Such love for your granddaughter in this one. If she confides in you, you are a fortunate Grandma! Lydi**
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2 Years Ago
Thanks Lydi**. Beth lives with us. Yes her first love and how the heart breaks. All part of the lear.. read moreThanks Lydi**. Beth lives with us. Yes her first love and how the heart breaks. All part of the learning curve, we have to go through. Hard to witness her upset though. Pleased you stopped by.
love can be cruel
striking with a serrated knife
you bleed butcher red
Love can be so cruel, and the pain is horrible! The poem is emotional and sad. The reader can feel that pain. So sorry your granddaughter got hurt like that.
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2 Years Ago
Thank you for your thoughts. Poor girl is really heartbroken. We want our chicks to be happy don:t w.. read moreThank you for your thoughts. Poor girl is really heartbroken. We want our chicks to be happy don:t we? Appreciate you stopping by Karen.
Wonderful words Chris, being a parent/grandparent holds so much joy but also it’s fair share of worry. All that we want in life is to see those that we love be happy.
Lathe
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2 Years Ago
So right Lathe. We want our chicks to be happy. We have raised her since she was a year old and it i.. read moreSo right Lathe. We want our chicks to be happy. We have raised her since she was a year old and it is upsetting to witness her suffering even though we know it's a learning curve. Thanks for your valued thoughts.
It's hard to think about the future when pain is so in your face. I suppose the rebound is a lot sweeter, but only after we have swept up the crumbs of wet was our life. Great writing Christine!
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Thanks Crowley. Yes, poor girl is suffering. All part of life's rich tapestry, but it is hard to wit.. read moreThanks Crowley. Yes, poor girl is suffering. All part of life's rich tapestry, but it is hard to witness :)
I love the ending of this poem. I hope and pray that it's the first and last rain of love for her. You painted a picture of a heartbreak but then put me out of the misery with the last few hopeful lines.
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Thank you Fairy. She will learn to love again I am sure. Hard to see her so upset. Thanks for checki.. read moreThank you Fairy. She will learn to love again I am sure. Hard to see her so upset. Thanks for checking in. Hope all is well with you.
this is so beautifully worded...the pain does cut the parent or grandparent like a knife....
and those wounds are difficult to mend...
love's rain just won't stop....and the repetition of that line intimates that.
j.
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Many thanks J. All part of life's learning curve, but not easy to watch her heartbreak. She will rec.. read moreMany thanks J. All part of life's learning curve, but not easy to watch her heartbreak. She will recover. There will be others.
Have probably been the cause of a few tears and regret this now a tad more sensible and " grown up"
Tis different for us boys, or so we would have people believe.
Hopefully young Beth will heal quickly and find a pebble that suits better.
Lovely poem Christine.
Hope all is well in sunny Berks
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2 Years Ago
Thank you Gee. Yes, the young guns can certainly break a few tender hearts. She will recover in time.. read moreThank you Gee. Yes, the young guns can certainly break a few tender hearts. She will recover in time and no doubt be wary in future of who she trusts with her heart. At the moment I am giving her lots of tkc. Have a great week-end.
Beautiful piece Chris full of compassion and understanding. How we suffer with our little ones.
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2 Years Ago
Thank you Tony. So right, our Beth is heartbroken. Of course she will recover in time. Part of the l.. read moreThank you Tony. So right, our Beth is heartbroken. Of course she will recover in time. Part of the learning curve but it is sad to see.
Chris
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I think also this is something of a development in yr Work and we are hearing the true 'Raw Word' co.. read moreI think also this is something of a development in yr Work and we are hearing the true 'Raw Word' coming thru.
'Raw Word' is a phrase we use in Spoken Word - it means you are getting to the nub of the experience.. read more'Raw Word' is a phrase we use in Spoken Word - it means you are getting to the nub of the experience - definitely good :)
dear Chris... I have three granddaughters... and I cannot imagine their being in pain. My grandson has not suffered pain, except for the loss of a first girlfriend who wanted to establish her Life Goal of attending College before falling in love. Now my grandson is also studying for his Career.
Your Poem is more tragic than minor upsets. A lovely Poem from a devoted Grandmother. tenderly, Pat
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Thank you dear Pat. Beth who is 21 is heartbroken. Cried all night she did. No consoling her. A firs.. read moreThank you dear Pat. Beth who is 21 is heartbroken. Cried all night she did. No consoling her. A first lesson for her in relationship breakups. Us grandmother's don't like our chicks being upset, do we? Thank you so much for your thoughts.
Albert, my paternal grandfather introduced me to Tennyson when I was nine. I have loved poetry ever since but did not attempt writing a single piece until I was 40. It's never too late to try somethin.. more..