Where The Snowdrops Grow

that light feather touch
so gentle on a cool cheek
in a grey winter garden
struggling to find spring

a breath from nowhere
as a birch tree's tangled tresses
bow in silent serenity
i felt your presence

a spirit in passing
where the snowdrops grow
with their show of white skirts
i miss you

Reviews

[Carola]

OMG! just saw your poem, i've just finished writing one about snowdrops. you're very good on metaphors.
i don't think they grow here naturally, only in pots, probably much better where it's a bit cooler like in tasmania.
will publish mine in a day or two when I get the images just how I want them to be.
cheerio carola

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Carola. Have just paid your snowdrop poem a visit. Absolutely exquisite. You have done the little snowdrop proud.

Chris

[Pete]

this so beautifully and delicately speaks volumes directly to the soul in a different realm. i felt this deeply as i read. love your "snowdrops" as they melted me inside. a blessed tribute. sad and touching but not a bad way to start my day ... :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Pete for your thiughts. Will.pay you a visit later today.

Chris

[Aluppi Jampur]

Beautiful words Chris.
We feel people near us even when they're few away.

[Chris Shaw]

How true that is. Many thanks yous for this encouraging review Chrome.

Chris

[Sami Khalil]

Gentle words, beautiful imagery, serene thoughts. I love it. You add so much positivity to our lives. You enrich our souls to feel, see and taste the beautiful things all around us even the minute ones.

[Chris Shaw]

You are such a kind, thoughtful soul. Bless your warm heart Sami.

Chris

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly dear Chris.

[Miss Sharon]

(a breath from nowhere as a birch tree's tangled tresses bow in silent serenity i felt your presence) Beautiful! I have felt 'his' presence as well. ~Sharon

[Chris Shaw]

And it is a comfort when that happens Sharon. Yes, it is a blessing. Thank you dear Sharon for gracing my page with your thoughts. You are appreciated.

Chris

[Louisa Chan]

I enjoyed the calm and serenity (the gentle presence of the person you missed) in your poem.

I like the way you personify the winter garden, the tree branches, and the snowdrops,
and your very direct and powerful confession in the last line: I miss you.

So, I feel your very strong urge to address this poem directly to the person you miss, and how desperate you are.

And a strong contrast between your strong feelings and the calm and serene before the last line.

Your poem, in some way, reminds me of a very short one I wrote before, in that the surrounding is
a calm and serene one:

My life companion


I slow down every move I make

I feel like time’s by my side

My eyes blink to the flow of time

My heart beats in one accord



I let time pass

And stroke me on my cheeks

Soft like a gentle breeze

It is with me all the time

It has stayed all the time

My life companion

[Chris Shaw]

Your beautiful and thoughtful review Louisa, certainly picks up on my current emotions. I have recently lost my mum. She was always a serene and calming presence before her long illness. Yes I miss her, but I have missed the person she was for eight years. Your own poem a pleasure to read. Thank you for sharing.

Chris

[Louisa Chan]

I see Chris.
You have my thoughts and wishes.
It's perfectly okay to live with fond memories and consider that she's still around...why not? Who knows if she's not still around... Sometimes, the invisible makes us happier than the visible, I guess?
(I still consider my papa and my puppy to be with me all the time. Their love transcends time and physical existence, I choose to believe as a way of self-consolation.)
Very pleased to be your friend.

[Lisasview]

Oh Chris, this is so lovely and so sad...
You really capture nature in your words and how nature relates to ones feelings..
Loved this..
Lisa

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Lisa. Hope all is OK with you. Have a lovely day. Bkuecsjy here.

Chris

[Lisasview]

You are always welcome Chris..
Lisa, clear now but we expect another week of rain

[Lathen Griffiths]

A feeling of peacefulness in your words here Chris,

Kind regards

Lathe

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Lathe. You certainly picked up on my intentions with this piece. Have a lovely Sunday.
read moreThank you Lathe. You certainly picked up on my intentions with this piece. Have a lovely Sunday.

Chris

[KAREN]

Beautiful flow and imagery! The sadness is felt in this read. I loved the second stanza!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Karen for your thoughtful review. Have a good day.

Chris

[KAREN]

You're very welcome!

[knighngale]

aww, i share this sentiment. I was in college, alone, scared, when a boy said my name. I looked up fearfully, to find him smiling at me...:D great read!

[Chris Shaw]

Really pleased you shared where my poem took you. Glad this memory came back to you. Thank you for a second review. I appreciate that.

Chris

[knighngale]

most welcome, Chris, :D I truly enjoyed it, I get a kick out of it, :D

[Relic]

This is a sad one, Chris. There's a connection between the silence of the snowflakes and the silence of the one you miss.

A very touching write.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thank yous Tim for your thoughts. All the best.

Chris