Illuminated

(spontaneous write)

enhanced the beaded droplet dew

at dawn the branches creaked in pain

but noon day sun has cast a spell

each gemstone gleams with lustrous light

this birch tree leaves the rest in shade

Reviews

[lightsong]

"at dawn the branches creaked in pain" this line really make us feel the sore..... your poem is written beautifully and reaches us with its brilliance and wisdom in a gentle way. if we wait with patience until the right time, we will shine brightly.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you lightsong for visiting this older write. We all have our moments. Just like the tree does and often out of season and when you least expect it. I appreciate you dear poet.

Chris

[Relic]

A perfect image, Chris. A perfect example of show don't tell. :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Tim. Appreciate you stopping by. All the best.

Chris

[Mike Keenan]

This is quite effective without punctuation. Everything connected like Jung's concept of spirit and shadow.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Mike. Pleased you enjoyed this short and visual poem. All the best.

Chris

[Robert Trakofler]

I have always loved that word... Illuminated it means so many things at once:) you squeezed a lot in so few lines in this piece dear Chris

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Bunny. I also like the word illuminated. So appreciate you stopping by.

Chris

[Fran Marie]

A beautifully crafted piece
of brevity ..the birch tree is
especially a lovely tree ..
liked the personification
within the lines ..

Nice Work

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks for stopping by Fran to leave your thoughts. Have a good Friday.

Chris

[Patricia]

This is lovely, I adore Birch trees, sensitive here in Illinois but we have a lot of them, they get sick easy. Such pretty trees and grow in interesting ways and it gives them personality. Trees deserve more poetic verse. Nice piece of writing Chris :)

[Chris Shaw]

You offer so much encouragement with your reviews Patricia. You are very much appreciated.
read moreYou offer so much encouragement with your reviews Patricia. You are very much appreciated.

Chris

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Chris... as we age... our branches creak and often feel
the pain; however when the healing Sun warms us ... the pain subsides
and Peace remains... Blessings sleep while Angels keep close by.
tenderly, Pat

[Chris Shaw]

You truly gift the most poetic responses Pat. Sunshine a great healer and I can't wait for warmer days. Sending love across the pond.

Chris

[Soren]

What a beautiful image. The metaphor was wonderful and the whole poem left a feeling of peace and hope. I enjoyed it.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Soren, your review is so encouraging and I thank you for it.

Chris

[JE Falcon]

A warm poem, trees are always a nice touch too, especially the river birch.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Falcon. Trees and the river. Can't help thinking of summer when I have those two words in the same sentence. All the best.

Chris

[Dave]

A beautiful picture you paint. Taking us from the wet of dawn to the shining skies of noon.
Nicely done, Chris.
Take care - Dave

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Dave. Short and sweet. Pleased you enjoyed and even more pleased for your visit.
read moreThank you Dave. Short and sweet. Pleased you enjoyed and even more pleased for your visit.

Chris

[Lisasview]

Oh, I love this simple sweet poem...really made me see what you wrote.. creaked in pain..gosh what a line!!!
I haven't been at reviewing recently.. My birthday week took over..But today I was hard at work revising my poems..
I now have a few back on...
Changed artwork, punctuation, etc.
I am happy for now with Hand-In-Hand..

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Lisa, I hope to be more active on here soon following my mum's passing. So pleased you enjoyed this. Happy belated birthday greetings to you.

Chris

[Lisasview]

That will be great.. I look forward to reading more of yours Chris..
Lisa