Illuminated

(spontaneous write)

enhanced the beaded droplet dew

at dawn the branches creaked in pain

but noon day sun has cast a spell

each gemstone gleams with lustrous light

this birch tree leaves the rest in shade

Reviews

[lightsong]

"at dawn the branches creaked in pain" this line really make us feel the sore..... your poem is written beautifully and reaches us with its brilliance and wisdom in a gentle way. if we wait with patience until the right time, we will shine brightly.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you lightsong for visiting this older write. We all have our moments. Just like the tree does and often out of season and when you least expect it. I appreciate you dear poet.

Chris

[red93]

Beautiful Chris you evoke this scene perfectly - Excellent ✨️✨️✨️✨️✨️

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Tony. Hope this day is being kind to you.

Chris

[Zoe Richardson]

Aha! Very clever, a tree "throwing shade" at the others. I love poems about nature, and yours are always a treat.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Zoe. Nothing like a bit of nature to keep us going when the doldrums set in. Really appreciate your visit.

Chris

[Dennis Wolf]

Huh... I was going to try coming up with something similar, set in a forest area in the morning... Ended up writing 200+ words, but I still failed to reproduce the feeling of this one.

Wonderful write!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Dennis. My muse has a mean streak. She can be very economical with words at times. Occasionally it pays off. I really appreciate your kind review.

Chris

[Dennis Wolf]

Well, shorter writes tend to have a stronger punch at times.

Cheers

[W. Barrett Munn]

This iambic tetrameter quatrain reminds me of Elizabeth Bishop, a high bar over which to leap.

Winston

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks for our thoughtful comment Winston.

Chris

[Weeping willow]

Beautiful words and images are inspiring. ;-}

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Weeping willow for reading and your thoughts. Have a good Sunday.

Chris

[Sami Khalil]

Inspirations come spontaneously as what happened to our wonderful poetess, making us react in many ways to the beauty of it all; in this case, sunlight reflecting sparkled gems on many things. Wow!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Sami for your charming review. A happy new year to you. All the very best.

Chris

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy! You too. You are welcome Chris.

[Neville]

You just can't beat a good old birch tree neither, can ya ................. a spontaneous review, if ever there woz ......................... N :)

[Chris Shaw]

Ha! Thank you Neville. Spontaneous meets spontaneous :)

[Red Brick Keshner]

Such beauty from nature's cycle. There are majestic rainforests with similar processes and a favourite sight is the dappling of sunlight through the canopy. Taking it all in and transforming into poetry brings us full circle. Our lives may be faster, even more mobile and more varied. But broken down to its most rudimentary elements we can appreciate the parallels that nature affords. Thanks for sharing, Chris. This was enjoyed immensely. Frederick.

[Chris Shaw]

I have a fascination for how sunlight creates such spectacular imagery when it find morning dew. Thank you Frederick, I appreciate your visit.

Chris

[Carola]

ahh, you must be going outside at dawn to notice the dew droplets on birch leaves, would that cold air venture be before or after coffee?
cheerio carola

[Chris Shaw]

Hi Carola, I can see all this from my window :) I have a birch standing like a sentinel beside my house. I have a close up view from my bedroom. Lovely it is. I see this tree through the seasons. Tha ks forcstopping by.

Chris