Catch A Falling Fish

(a rave from the grave ...)

in comes early summer heat

poker hot spot dazzling bright

takes a hold i see a torch

blazing forth a scorching light

in the shadows there stand i

watching as the tears drip down

face stained wet as rivers run

trampled feelings short lived crown

pick me up that's life my friend

dust me down out goes the trust

markers left upon my heart

leave no silver only rust

Reviews

[Samuel Dickens]

Wow! You wrote this? Not what I would expect from you, no, not at all. This is edgy and dare I say... hip? It seems a throwback to the smoky, coffee-drenched days of Greenwich Village. A saxophone plays as Christine sits on a stool before the crowd, reciting this, her latest poem. The beatniks say to themselves, "Man, this is heavy..."

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Sam, my muse has her moods you know :))It ain't all flowers and sunshine. I really appreciate you checking in. Hope all is good with you my story teller friend. Take lots of care.

Chris

[red93]

Excellent reflections on lost love and broken promises Chris - nicely executed and I particularly like the final Stanza.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Tony for another encouraging review. Hope your Monday has been good and that you have wrapped up against the cold.

Chris

[red93]

Friday night / Saturday morning we had the worst of the Storm Chris (touch wood) - no snow here as yet !

[shadrach hah]

Hi Chris, your words come from the heart and they pack a sad punch. Scars left upon the heart, I can relate to those scars, I have many. It is good when we do have friends to pick us up and dust us off for the next round. A powerful write Chris. I got much out of reading your rave. Have a wonderful Monday. Hugs always....Mchael.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Mike on a freezing cold morning. We have a smattering of snow. Wrap up warm and many thanks for giving this older poem an airing.

Chris

[shadrach hah]

You are welcome, Chris. Loved the content. Stay safe. Have a wonderful Tuesday. Hugs always....Mike.

[Shelley Warner]

I love your title "Catch a Falling Fish", make me think of Sinatra's "Catch a Falling Star". A very heartfelt poem. Yes, we need to catch each other and dust each other off.

[Chris Shaw]

I remember the Sinatra song Shelley. Thanks for stopping by to review. You are appreciated.

Chris

[Azifwecare]

Wowzers your words pack a punch to them. 😳

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Silent1. Have a good weekend.

Chris

[Ballpark Frank]

this is heartbreaking......I'm sorry.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for checking this poem out Frank. True, it was heartbreaking at the time. All under the bridge now. So much so my muse turned it into lyrics.

Chris

[Pete]

wow. not in your usual style. so deeply heartfelt. the hurt of betrayal, ouch, this hurts. i sense a knife rather than a fish. a difficult read. a powerful gut punch in this ... :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Pete. All done and dusted but my muse brought it back and lyrical with it :))

Chris

[Ken Simm.]

I find it interesting that the mood and flow of this belies its subject. The flow is really quite jaunty and this tackling of the subject in such a way shows an inordinately strong use of language and rythm.

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Ken, you are quite right about jaunty. A good description. Every now and then my muse wanders into lyrics. This is where she ended up.. Quite different from most of my writing. I am delighted you paid me a visit. Thank you so much for dropping by. All the best.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"face stained wet as rivers run"---what a great line.
sadness so overwhelming when we lose loved ones
Markers left upon my heart....i have many of those.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Those markers, oh yes. I have a few of them. Thank you J and for your interpretation of this poem.read moreThose markers, oh yes. I have a few of them. Thank you J and for your interpretation of this poem.

Chris

[Dave Brown]

Yes a different write
Not sure what to make of it, sounds deep as tho a relationship has crashed with someone needing a kick in the rear to get it all back together
No!!
I know I'm a clueless reviewer

[Chris Shaw]

Don't worry about it Dave, it's only a poem my muse gave to me a whoie back. Thanks for checking it out though :)

Chris