Mind Corridors

in darkest corners

cobwebs remain unshaken

tears trapped like dead flies

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

dang .. the Cafe' is presenting senryu today. just started my visits and already two out of three .. this one is super dark and all i can think of is getting hit in the face unawares by spider webbing ... your personification of ones tears in such a place is super says i ... dead flies ... we create these horrors in our dark corners and paint them with unapproachable horror so as never to be looked at in the light .. but they fester don't they? powerful stuff ma'am! really has me thinking! thanks for sharing
E.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Mr E, I woke from a dream and this sprang out:)
Many thanks for your thoughtful response. I don't like dead flies or spiders webs draped in corners as reminders that stuff hasn't been done and dusted:)

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

no... its so very unhealthy for us to entertain them ... wrapping and re-wrapping in webs so thick .. all we know is that what is in there is painful ... perhaps even horrifying

[andrew mitchell]

Great write Chris. You have excelled to the max with this one. Very smart written and so clever.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Andrew for your generous review. All the best.

Chris

[andrew mitchell]

Top of the pile this one!

[Chris Shaw]

Too kind you are :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, what a last line, I wish I had written that one.

Tears can feel so ugly on the inside, and be such pests.

Senryu away, Chris!
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you J. When I think I can't string anything together, along comes a senryu:)

[Lorry]

And the light bulbs only flicker, adding to the eerieness of traversing these crumbling halls. And you can't ask a growed up to hold your hand every time you think. Well you can, but they'll look at you like you're a weirdo on a bus. I try not to think anymore Chris, I have a tattoo on my head, under the hair that has a skull & crossbones, saying "That be beasties here!" ☠️😊💀

[Chris Shaw]

You know that tattoo with its skull and cross bones could be a warning. We all have those beasties lurking in dark corners waiting to put the spoiler on things.Time for jaffa cakes and a cuppa :) Thank you Lorry. Blowing a gale down these parts. Typical Bank Holiday weather.

Chris

[Lorry]

Been torrential rain here too after days of that yellow sky ball fire thingy coming out to play. Will be blazing sunshine once people go back to work tomorrow.

[Chris Shaw]

Well it's still howling here. Good news is that all the wretched catkins that give me hay fever are downed :) a small silver lining :)

[Lorry]

Kite flying weather here now. Think I'll buy a sunbed if I turn any paler, would 5ake a fortnight under it to not resemble caspar the ghost 👻