Mind Corridors

in darkest corners

cobwebs remain unshaken

tears trapped like dead flies

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

dang .. the Cafe' is presenting senryu today. just started my visits and already two out of three .. this one is super dark and all i can think of is getting hit in the face unawares by spider webbing ... your personification of ones tears in such a place is super says i ... dead flies ... we create these horrors in our dark corners and paint them with unapproachable horror so as never to be looked at in the light .. but they fester don't they? powerful stuff ma'am! really has me thinking! thanks for sharing
E.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Mr E, I woke from a dream and this sprang out:)
Many thanks for your thoughtful response. I don't like dead flies or spiders webs draped in corners as reminders that stuff hasn't been done and dusted:)

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

no... its so very unhealthy for us to entertain them ... wrapping and re-wrapping in webs so thick .. all we know is that what is in there is painful ... perhaps even horrifying

[Dylan Macadham]

a starkly compelling 5-7-5 haiku that takes me deep into my own cobwebbed corridors ...again, you've nailed it, Chris!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Dylan for giving these old cobwebs an airing. Pleased you found this one :)

Chris

[Yuet]

Tears dead flies
What an unfamiliar description, that's what poem is for

[Chris Shaw]

Spiders webs catch raindrops of great beauty but they also catch flies which die. All depends on the poet's mood. Thank you so much Yuet.

Chris

[Franky]

This me wonder where did these thoughts come from? Very original my dear

[Chris Shaw]

Sorry Frankie for late reply. Spiders webs catch raindrops which are beautiful or they also catch flies. All depends on the mood of the poet. Have a lovely day my friend.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

Dear Chris. Amazing use of words. You allowed the reader to feel and see your words. Trapped like dead flies. I liked this strong description. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Coyote. Pleased hyiu enjoyed.

Chris

[LCat80star]

This is very interesting and dark and what is even more impressive is that these short words can have a lot of impact and give some meaning. Lovely piece, I liked this.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thank yous Lavi for your very positive review. Very much appreciated.

Chris

[Azifwecare]

felt this, and serves as a reminder to me that I seem to constantly need, to let go of stuff . I need to go dust the cobwebs from the darkest corners of my mind, maybe I won't be the one crying anymore.

[Chris Shaw]

Really appreciate your interpretation Silent1. Best not let the dust gather in the mind. Be sure to sweep those corridors clean so the past doesn't come back to haunt you. Many thanks.

Chris

[The Ink Chapters]

Ooh, I saw the title and was immediately drawn. Lovely writing! Hope your well

[Chris Shaw]

All ok here, fingers crossed. Hope the same for you too. Pleased you enjoyed this little senryu that spoke to me on waking.

Chris

[The Ink Chapters]

It brings such imagery , especially the last line

[The Ink Chapters]

It’s haunting, and I feel like during these times it’s appropriate, this dark corner we are in

[sharonlee]

Oh my... so profoundly and beautifully powerful!
Brilliant!

Sharonlee

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks sharonlee. Your visit and thoughts truly appreciated by this writer. All good wishes.read moreMany thanks sharonlee. Your visit and thoughts truly appreciated by this writer. All good wishes.

Chris

[undisclosed]

this is so short, but it's all that really needed to be said. I love this. it really resonates with me, thank you.

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased to meet you on my page and especially for your thoughtful review. Many thanks undisclosed.read morePleased to meet you on my page and especially for your thoughtful review. Many thanks undisclosed.

Chris

[undisclosed]

I'm new to this forum, but I wanted a place where I could read poetry and have others read mine. I had the pleasure of stumbling across your page on my first day, I've read all of your pieces and I love them :)

[Chris Shaw]

Goodness me, how many did you read? I've got hundreds on here:)) Can't thank you enough. Will add you as a friend so I can see when you post.