Spirited

a faltering flame

in a room filled with darkness

fights for love of light

Reviews

[barleygirl]

What makes this especially intense for me is the title, as it relates to the content. Spirited people are often the ones who take darkness the hardest. Just look at all the artists & musicians that die young. You've captured the essence of haiku/senryu perfectly: (1) expression thru imagery & (2) saying a ton with very few words (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Chris Shaw]

I couldn't ask for a better review on this senryu. Thank you Margie. Really appreciate you and what you do for this place.

Chris

[Pete]

i'm always intrigued by writes with few words. they contain so much. to live is to have light and vice versa. well said. a spirit of light can be seen from miles away and is a blessing and a joy to be around. this lights my fire on a cold day. glad i came across this one. well done chris ... :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Pete for your encouraging response. Glad you enjoyed this one.

Chris

[Ted Kniffen]

Perhaps it is the spirit of a loved one come back to light that darkened room that causes the flame to flicker.
Beautiful use of a few words Chris.
Well done.

Be safe.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Ted, for that lovely response. Most appreciated. You take care too.

Chris

[Danny Metcalfe]

Great haiku. The Earth is the room filled with darkness, your imagination the flame. Your poem is a candle that has given the dark room of earth a little more light.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Danny. Pleased to meet you on my page. I appreciate your thoughts and your visit.

Chris

[Patricia]

OMG! this is so brilliant and beautiful. I do envy poets that can pull these off, not something I attempt because well, I suck at it! But this is terrific really terrific.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Patricia, pleased you enjoyed this one. Pleased for the encouragement.

Chris

[Patricia Wedel]

Yes... we can be high-spirited among the flowers who have nothing to say... but provide our Soul with song. Joyfully, Pat

[Chris Shaw]

They do indeed provide song for our soul. That is a beautiful response Pat. Sending you love across the waves with thanks too.

Chris

[Audie G. Couch]

It is the little poems like this that get me every time.
Since they say so much. The "light"complements the "darkness" and vis-versa. "Spirited" makes me think about, and feel a lot.
Nicely done. =-)

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Audie for leaving such an encouraging review. All good wishes.

Chris

[Broken.]

I agree with barleygirl, this is perfectly intense. I see a candle trying to hold its flame to the darkness, the darkness swallowing its light, but the candle fights on because it too only knows light...

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Broken. Appreciate your visit and review.

Chris

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That indomitable spirit which finds light from the darkest of situation. A very deep poem in so few words... Loved it

[Chris Shaw]

I really like how you interpreted this senryu Sima. Many thank yous.

Chris

[sette]

those three lines create an impact that even inspite of the competitive world we are in there is nothing wrong in being human

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for stopping by sette. Your thoughts welcome a d appreciated. All good wishes.

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Chris