Spirited

a faltering flame

in a room filled with darkness

fights for love of light

Reviews

[barleygirl]

What makes this especially intense for me is the title, as it relates to the content. Spirited people are often the ones who take darkness the hardest. Just look at all the artists & musicians that die young. You've captured the essence of haiku/senryu perfectly: (1) expression thru imagery & (2) saying a ton with very few words (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Chris Shaw]

I couldn't ask for a better review on this senryu. Thank you Margie. Really appreciate you and what you do for this place.

Chris

[Stuart Munro]

Light how could we live without it , even in Victorian Times they found a candle
In birth we come into the light , in Death we are supposed to see a light at the end if a tunnel

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks for sharing your thoughts Ken. Much appreciated.

Chris

[Stuart Munro]

It’s Ken , it’s all I Ken Do, Chris , a wee comment
On a Good poem

[W. Barrett Munn]

excellent Chris. nice use of metaphor

Winston

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Winston. An old one out for a breath of fresh air.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

some people crave for light; darkness can be scary for some...a lovely Haiku Chris....lots of imagery and imagination....
Best, B

[Chris Shaw]

I appreciate you stopping by Betty to give this oldie your considered opinion. Out for a spring airing. Hope all is good with you my friend.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Always Chris, I love your writing!
Take care
Best, B

[willweb]

Wow, this says so much for only three little lines. I loved this Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased you like this one will. Thanks so much for the review. All the best.

Chris

[Ayvid N]

It's the nature of light to fight the darkness. The flame is inherently a lover and giver of light and it is up against darkness, such a powerful foe. Kudos Chris! The brevity and beauty with which is you wrote this haiku is just amazing.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks DIVYA for a great review and all the encouragement you send my way. Keeps me going. Have a happy Tuesday.

Chris

[Ayvid N]

Will be so happy to read you always, my friend. You're always welcome. 🙋‍♀️💕

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you ..🌺

[Poetic Beauty]

I think many times in life we feel as if we are a flame in the darkness searching fighting for light.

[Chris Shaw]

I think you may be right PB. Thank you for checking in.

Chris

[rew]

this one is so good that I can't think of anything to say about it speechless?
everything about it screams - genius.
I bet the sons of Nippon would have to rise early to get anywhere near this.
I've done a few of these and mine (now that i've seen yours) are so juvenile - this is sophistication and the genre exemplified.
I keep looking at it thinking a bit of all this might stick to me - it even sounds poetic - whereas the Nippon stuff sounds clumsy even kamikaze but, I've said it before, we take foreign forms and make them our own. As you have done.
rew.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you rew. Pleased you enjoyed this one. All the best.

Chris

[Rick Puetter]

Now that's really nice. You nailed this on both the poetry and the message. Well done!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Rick for the appreciation of this haiku. Most welcome.

Chris

[VelvetPotato]

This gives me chills. Sometimes I feel this is what life is all about. There is so much darkness in life, especially today. But there is hope, there is a flame, fighting for attention and triumph. If we can feed that flame, we can find our light. Very inspirational. :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts. Pleased you found this piece inspirational. All good things.read moreThank you for sharing your thoughts. Pleased you found this piece inspirational. All good things.

Chris

[Vectra Mendonie]

I really liked this. It was just a little thing but it had a lot of perceivable meaning. Good job!

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks. Just lately I have become quite fond of senryu and haiku. They may be short, but you do have to give them quite a bit of thought. Pleased you liked this one.

Chris