Whispers At Dawn

gentle rain falls on a mackintosh day

drips sedately, rolls then disappears

drizzle on glazed glass, cleanses

half heartedly plays with a pane

takes a journey in quiet thought

each raindrop caught like a stitch

knitted, soft white wool, fingers

caress rows of purl, plain, purl, plain

high neck sweater taking shape

on long patient alloy needles

a measure of love for one who

died young, passed prematurely

breathe in.....breathe in deep .....

count to ten....and then again ........

memories from the vaults of wish

wish you were here, wish i, wish i could

have one more kiss ................

Reviews

[Kathy Mc Cathy]

Water has memory , every raindrop ever felt reminds me of the people there are in my life , how lucky i am to have them , As u said each raindrop is a vault of treasured memories , with each moment , passes water diffuses into the air and falls as raindrops reminding us of the times that have passed , The fresh air , the earthen smell of the dirt becomes the atmosphere of that profound memory , Thanks for this chris , its a touching read

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Kathy for saying how my words spoke to you. I appreciate that. All good wishes.
read moreThank you Kathy for saying how my words spoke to you. I appreciate that. All good wishes.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my... delicate .. super fine work setting the scene .. yesterday ... on my walk with Beauregard the Princely Dog ... it was drizzling .. the images playing on the glass .. and i have this misty sort of backdrop inside as she sits knitting ..with alloy needles (i recall me Ma's so easily .. fat, light and worn green) "mackintosh day" ..brilliant Chris .. two words and we have the full Monty of Autumn leaves and trees .. V3 is the turn for me ... an early one but the progression afterwards gently brings me to that place .. the mourning no matter how close or distant .. still stings .. chokes and tears well up .. wonderful work my friend .. super felt this one .. its got it all says i! ;)
E.

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased you enjoyed the read Mr E. Many thank yous for your thoughtful response.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"purl, plain, purl, plain" love it...love stitched so carefully with reckless abandon...and the memories bring
that touch, that kiss of sadness with the same reckless abandon.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Jacob. Please you liked this poem. Alwats thankful for your support.

Chris

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Breathe in... Breathe in deep... So impactful. Those who gone prematurely left a void in our hearts... And the longing stitches lovely stories.. To keep and soothe with the pain. So melancholic.....

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Sima for your lovely review.

Chris

[Weeping willow]

So softly your whispers flow across my mind into a beautiful image, Feeling of the heart take flight within these words inside your write ;-]

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Weeping willow for checking in and reading this poem. Most appreciated.

Chris

[iliOZ]

i will teach the love if my love the sad and sweet rhythm of whispering goodbye you present here, as i am sure i wouldn't want to master it.

thank you Chris

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you iliOZ for your response. All good wishes.

Chris

[light and ashes]

Beautiful....filled nostalgia and melancholy... and sweet longing.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Light and Ashes for your review. All good wishes.

Chris

[light and ashes]

Same to you!

[Sami Khalil]

You whispers at dawn are softly heard and your imagery at dawn is calmly observed. I like the imagery of a journey in quiet thoughts. Beautiful, mesmerizing and much needed now in our times. Keep the pen inked and on a roll...

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Sami for this lovely encouraging review. Much appreciated.

Chris

[Sami Khalil]

"takes a journey in quiet thought
each raindrop caught like a stitch

knitted, soft white wool, fingers
caress"

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

Graciously welcome.

[Sami Khalil]

"breathe in.....breathe in deep .....
count to ten....and then again ........

memories from the vaults of wish"

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

Muchly welcome. ..

[Eyeright]

Love the verbal imagery and how it weaves itself in and out of sorrow. Well done.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Eyeright for your visit. I appreciate your thoughts.

Chris