Famous Last Words

(there is more than an element of truth in these words)

darling can you remember
can you remember when
you couldn't make the effort
all those years ago

when I found myself
in the delivery room prematurely
while you preferred pissing
it up with your friends

can you recall the shock when
at eight o'clock the following day
you found out you were a father
rather embarrassing eh

and I don't suppose for one
moment you noticed the look
of dismay on my face
when you did arrive

to gift me with those famous words
not how are you my dearest love
but a necklace of turds in my opinion
after all the pain I had gone through

puking up alone, frightened,
unsupported you asked me why
yes you asked me why I hadn't
birthed you a son and from that
very second my dear I knew we were
finished, we were undone

Reviews

[Lorry]

A necklace of turds??? &?
You certainly reminded me not to scorn a woman. 😀
Do girls get some secret class boys don't know about, where they learn how to win every argument and are given an encyclopedia of putdowns, or does it just come naturally? 😀
Made me think of my own Mums simmering eyes, where lips were superglued until further notice and the ensuing silence showed him the error of his ways.
I always remember that lesson as silence being golden... But don't ya just know it, I ended up growing up and becoming one of THEM, a man 😀
You knew you were finished suggests he was too drunk to notice the alarm bells and klaxons of silence that was deafening to everyone else.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Lorry. No secret classes, just experience. Women have had to learn the hard way, and that is why they can be so good at those scorching put downs like your mum was good at. Drink can also play a sorry part as well. Oh Lorry, not all geezers are tarred with the same brush before you have me down as a man hater :)) Needless to say this relationship didn't survive :)

Chris

[Lorry]

Na Chris, but would be perfectly understandable if you were.
Personally, it's a mystery how women put up with us, but thanks on behalf of mankind.
I don't even attempt arguing any more, I just sigh and say "I'll get my coat."
I am fluent in that look. 😀

[Stella Armour]

oooh, i relate to this so well Chris, the midwife calling downstairs to tell my husband our 3rd born was about to arrive and him not coming ... saying he had seen it all before :( ... the beginning of the end and oddly enough she never did relate to him after she was born.
No wonder women are the stronger sex, they have to be lol.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Stella. Same here, my daughter never had a decent relationship with her father. He got his son in his second marriage. Caused much unhappiness for my daughter. Hope you are OK.

Chris

[Stella Armour]

yes thanks Chris, had my first haircut in 4 months today and wow do i feel better lol. Hope all is well with you :)

[Chris Shaw]

All OK here Stella. How lovely to have a hair cut. Mine is getting longer and longer. Must have made you feel on top of the world :)

[Stella Armour]

well yes, and because i no longer live in a city it was a walk in hairdresser near my son's shopand she cut it just as nicely as my old expensive lady ... ata fraction of the cost i might add. I was so elated to just walk in with no appointment and get it cut that i gave her a very big tip lol.

[Chris Shaw]

Everyone a winner then :))

[Stella Armour]

yes..... she deserved it cutting and shaping all that hair lol.

[light and ashes]

Good for you for choosing to leave now!

[Chris Shaw]

Time was called Allie, it was doomed. Thank you.

Chris

[light and ashes]

At least you know that now! You're welcome!

[Robert Trakofler]

oh my how incredibly horrid! I am surprised you didn't bludgeon him with a large metal medical instrument right then! but then again as most of you ladies know... revenge is always best served cold:/ ouch....

[Chris Shaw]

I'm not a violent person dear Bunny, but I'll have you know he took many a tongue lashing before time was called. You are right about revenge best being served cold. I have just served a slice here:)

Chris

[Robert Trakofler]

and it was a chilly one:)

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This is quiet rough but also very refreshing at your writing. That second stanza is really chilling . When we need more support and sutendly our loved one just simple don't care . That's really heart breaking. I find at English language if you wanna be rude you don't have to use rude words. It's enough to use some famous phrase at certain situation. That last stanza is also heart breaking when just birth son can bring joy but if is a daughter father is not just so please. This poem was for me quite masterpiece of human emotions and experiences. You was able to blend together sad moments of your life But it's have very nice form to read.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Poet's act for your considered opinion. Your thoughts here most welcome. Some people unfortunately are selfish and don't know how to care for others or support them.

Chris

[Cory Barrett]

Show them the door! Thats a hell of an awful story. if its true i'm sorry.... if its not you have convinced me that it is. Also a t**d necklace is a hell of a thing.

[Chris Shaw]

Some things you don't forget. A thing of the past, just like him. Thank you

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and i would hope these were the last words the speaker said to the subject of this poem and she left him in the dust of the hospital room...
Just the times when others are needed most...they think only of themselves.

j.

[Chris Shaw]

It dragged on longer before time was called once and for all. Some people are born selfish, he was one of them.

Chris