Pipe Dreams

breaks a new dawn
after a restless night

a splash of pink sunrise
soon colours my eyes

those blackbirds a singing
are hidden from sight

my thoughts are of childhood
i search through the skies

dear brother your silence
still shatters this heart

i'm sure you are out there
so ask that you please

whisper your presence
take hold of my hand

for a moment of comfort
come softly to me

Reviews

[Carola]

hi christine
"a splash of pink sunrise
soon colours my eyes"_______ i love those 2 lines particularly. think i'll to have to learn somehow, to be more ethereally descriptive in my poems.

you must've very close to your brother, so your personalities or likes, i assume would be similar. how lucky is that!
my sister & i are like chalk & cheese in personalities. can't say that i really think about my childhood much, coming from a dysfunctional family.
cheerio carola

[Chris Shaw]

I was very lucky with my siblings and childhood carola. I know how fortunate I was and that other people's childhood may have been different altogether. In those circumstances I can understand entirely where out of sight out of mind is best. Always appreciate your visits. All the best.

Chris

[Neville]

I swear as I read these words for the first time, some soul walked over my grave .. now read several times and it seems some soul is having a field day .. this is so good Chris on so many levels .. very sad of course because I can feel the loss that inspired it .. but yes, on so very many levels, it is write up there ..

Neville

[Chris Shaw]

What a lovely review Neville. Thank you so much. You have gone all blue. A calming avatar. Good to have our poetry site back. Pleased you gave this one an airing.

Chris

[Neville]

my pleasure Chris .. wot do you mean back?

[Chris Shaw]

Well I couldn’t access WC for three days. The website was down. Are you still having trouble logging in?

[Neville]

I haven't been trying recently because I am very much aware that there is a whole lot wrong with it and like I said, I fear I am running out of ink :)

[Neville]

on reflection, I also think how convenient for some that must have been .. Neville

[Chris Shaw]

No one has been able to use the site either in UK, USA or elsewhere. It has been completely down. Jacob contacted the owner to try and get it rectified. I can’t imagine you running out of ink.

[Ayesha]

When someone dear departs, it seems impossible to endure the pain. But the memories of the same person, occurring time and again are most agonizing.
A very sad yet beautiful poem.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Ayesha, your visit and thoughts are very much appreciated. Thank you.

Chris

[light and ashes]

This is sad....It makes me think of someone waiting for a loved one that has passed on, a great write.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Allie for your thoughts and your compliment. You are appreciated.

Chris

[light and ashes]

You're welcome

[pinhead07]

This is beautifully written, ma'am. The imagery is powerful.
breaks a new dawn
after a restless night

a splash of pink sunrise
soon colours my eyes

those blackbirds a singing
are hidden from sight.

Beautiful. Then the memories, most of our cherished memories are of childhood, aren't they? I can relate. The loneliness you feel is rightly conveyed. Hope you are well.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for your understanding review. Most appreciated. All is well with me and I hope the same for you.

Chris

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A very poignant write, dear Chris. Your title is quite revealing and it says so much in itself. The longing is palpable here and the restlessness of disturbed sleep and the need to reach out to one since passed is very delicately conveyed. Being in my youth i am yet to bear witness to many passings, but i know such days will come and I just hope i am well prepared for their arrival. With this poem you have worn your heart and longing on your sleeve and its both sad and beautiful in its brevity here. Such a touching write, dear Chris. I enjoyed it very much. :)))

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Jamila, I am happy that you haven't met yet those sad passings. Better they come later in life. Thank you so much for your very thoughtful review. Yes the title says much and I'm glad you picked up on it. Have a lovely week-end my friend. Are you still in lockdown?

Chris

[.]

I am remaining in my apartment for the most part. The city is open to gatherings of 10 or more, but I am using a wiser head, i think. Aside from a quick run to the market, I think i'll stay indoors and see how things pan out. I hope you are safe and well.

[Chris Shaw]

I am doing exactly the same as you. Food shopping and back home. I am biding my time too. Rather be cautious than sorry. Keep safe Jamila.

[Moonie]

This was so poignant and expressed with such grace. I understand the longing, living alone in my apartment right now with only work to keep me busy during the isolation. We all need poetry to comfort us in these difficult times, thank you for sharing!♡

[Chris Shaw]

Living alone can't be easy during these times of isolation. Thank you for your visit and sharing your lovely thoughts. From memory I think you may be a Doctor, so if that is the case, thank you again for your service. Take good care of yourself.

Chris

[Abhishek Asthana]

An emotional and touchy write... Human loss can not be healed with the time as memories keep on knocking the doors of the brain with the past events... My eyes are almost full of tears... this write is dedicated to the loved ones.... Thank you for sharing !!

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Abhishek, many thanks for your moving response. Happy you paid me a visit. All good wishes.
read moreDear Abhishek, many thanks for your moving response. Happy you paid me a visit. All good wishes.

Chris

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Chris... to be separated is such a loss. I was an only child; however, being separated from my son when he was out of high school and left the East Coast to explore the West coast ... left me at a terrible loss... although he visits and now has two young daughters. There is a chance they will live with us until they are settled on the East Coast. I do understand the feeling of Loss. truly, Pat

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Pat, thank you for your understanding. Loss in all its forms can be difficult to deal with. We all have to find our own way on that pathway. Loss when children fly the best can also be a challenge. I appreciate your encouragement.

Chris

[Ruth]

The soulful missing in this came with such an impact after the dawn breaking and the birdsong...I felt it not only read it, beautful Chris, incredibly touching.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Ruth, thank you for your encouragement. I appreciate your visits.

Chris

[Weeping willow]

Awe such a wonderfully expressed piece, could feel your words inside my soul in yearnings of childhood. So funny that we couldn't wait to grow up. Why I just don't know. Love your words. ;-}

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Weeping willow. Yes, I have lots of fond memories of my brother and my life with siblings. I really appreciate your kind review.

Chris