She said, He said

Blame it on tv

i watched in total awe

as ice crystals grew in

fine slow motion footage

bare branches became

draped in winter filigree

a haunting breathless beauty

i gasped at this sheer loveliness

as pristine white layers disguised

dark stark fingers of bark

beckoning boney digits

a fantasy fairy land of coldness

intricate, delicate, perfection

"how can you convey in words

such creation", says i and he replied

without the blink of an eye

without hesitation, he said

with his own brand of sincerity

"don't ask, it all looks friggin freezing"

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

I had to laugh at the ending of this one, Chris. Winter can be beautiful to watch. The ice forms patterns on the windows and the icicles hang from the branches...truth is though, I would prefer to watch it in a painting because, yes, it is "friggin freezing!: LOL Good one, Chris. Lydi**

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Lydi**. I had fun with this one.

Chris

[Jimmy Yetts]

His reaction: a stark, visceral, interpretation of imagery.
Your perspective is, of course, profoundly poetic.
On second thought, let's give him a bit of credit for succinct, rundown-neighborhood
street poetry.
Elegantly entertaining work, good poetess!

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Jimmy. This piece was designed to be entertaining. Pleased you enjoyed it.

Chris

[Robert Trakofler]

I get the feeling you and I walking on a hike would not make ten feet before staring at something that most others would find mundane:) people would often tell me that I drive them crazy when on walks cause I would freeze in my tracks at the first errant cloud or snail that happened by:) LOL many times I would freeze to see the freeze on the tree branches I have the pictures to prove it if I could find them in my photo catalog that is:)

[Chris Shaw]

Bunny you and I think alike. Once I saw the sun turn the rust on an old gasometer to a burnished bronze. It looked so beautiful, but others would have thought it ugly. There is beauty everywhere for those who look. Thank you for your thoughts.

Chris

[Dave]

OOOh Chris - so sorry he didn't appreciate the beauty in the "freeze".

Neat, I liked it.

Take care - Dave

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Dave. Pleased you enjoyed this poem and its humour.

Chris

[John the Baptist]

Well, sometimes opposites do complement each other. I'm sure while she was contemplating the winter's beauty, he was checking the car's antifreeze level. Really nice imagery in this one.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you John, and I have to agree that opposites can certainly attract. Your thoughts appreciated.

Chris

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I must agree with him. The cold isn't that pretty unless you're Elsa and like everything frozen. I like white. Put it on top of a rolling breaker making its way to shore and I'll call it beautiful. This was a fun little he said/she said with an unexpected ending. Nice work.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Fabian. Pleased you enjoyed my little bit of fun. Appreciate your visit.

Chris

[Dave Brown]

Haha and it is just starting
Very nicely written with a just right ending

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Dave. First poem for a while. Pleased it made you laugh. Thanks for your continued support.read moreHello Dave. First poem for a while. Pleased it made you laugh. Thanks for your continued support.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahahah oh you little devil you! how you caught me .. i love ice storms .. the stark bark covered and frozen ... indeed a quiet wonderland ... and friggin' freezing indeed ... my love for you has leaped and grown once more dakhlink ... what a sense of humor .. still sitting here chuckling as I type ... the dreamer and the realist at work here ... love it!
E.
ps. bundle up together my friend ... melt those worlds together ;)

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Mr E, thank you so much. Yes, very much the dreamer and the realist :) So pleased you enjoyed the humour in this little write :)) All good wishes to you my friend.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .......................

[AYVID N]

It amazes me how differently two people can view the world around them. It’s like the glass half-empty or half-full. Stunning descriptions of winter’s beauty too. This is such a lovely writing with humour and wit, dear Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

So pleased you saw the humour in these lines DIVYA. Yes very much like the glass half full or half empty. Thank you so much for your visit.

Chris

[Lorry]

One persons wonder is another persons confusion, and I'm confused. So are you the chalk or the cheese Chris?
There is nothing quite like hearing a harrumph when asking if they too see the beauty in such delicate form... It makes you seriously question the choices you made in life regarding the company you keep 😀
Love the beautifully described wonder and the clumsiness of the retort... And believe me, i know the look you drew him, ive seen it in every women I've ever known 😀

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Lorry. Am I the chalk or the cheese? I think I'd rather be the cheese served with a nice glass of port. Who wants to be plain old chalk? You saw the look then, all the way from where you are? :))

Chris

[Lorry]

Felt it on the back of my neck 😀

[roarke]

Heh, one person's beauty is another's liquid nitrogen.... good stuff here.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks roarke, pleased you enjoyed the read.

Chris