Haikus are a perfect example of how structure can force a writer to really be precise in word choice in order to capture the moment. This is a lovely glimpse … one that immediately evoked a memory of being along the water on the Blue Ridge Parkway, watching the sun turn the water into molten gold. Beautiful!
Wonderful use of words dear Chris. Water is a miracle and a blessing. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
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Water is certainly a miracle to many Coyote. When you have a mix of sunlight, you have it all. Thank.. read moreWater is certainly a miracle to many Coyote. When you have a mix of sunlight, you have it all. Thank you for your words.
A perfect 17 syllables here. I have had the experience described by this haiku. The continuous sparkling of the sun on the water can be almost hypnotic. Nicely done.
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Thank you John. Pleased you enjoyed the read. All good wishes.
No matter how minute the writeup is, it can show a giant picture with pinpoint detailing. It feels like the sunbeams sparkling on water are chaffing you to catch the sight if you can. Haha. Such a lovely piece.
This idea is why I got into that whole mountaineering thing. Climbing sucks, costs a fortune, and is inherently dangerous and terrifying to the extreme... but it's a feeling you can't find anywhere else when you get access to that part of nature in person, because you also gain access to a part of yourself you can't get access to normally. I think about my time in the military like that as well... life sucked at the time but it made me a better person at the end of the day, it was riches for my character.
This is a really important concept and I think it's getting lost on today's generation. Excellent work with this one, all around.
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Thank you David for your very generous review. Appreciated.
Chris
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You shouldn't call my review generous. I take what you give me. A good poem is prone to a good rev.. read moreYou shouldn't call my review generous. I take what you give me. A good poem is prone to a good review. It's my appreciation that I should be giving you.
Reminds me of a scene in Bexhill - on - Sea. The sparkling sea was a reflection of imaginary diamonds. Beautiful write!
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Don't those diamonds just delight kitty? Wonderful to watch and incredibly uplifting. Thank you my f.. read moreDon't those diamonds just delight kitty? Wonderful to watch and incredibly uplifting. Thank you my friend.
Haikus - are such a short, sweet way of expressing such beauty. Wonderful, I can easily picture the sunbeams sparkling off the water.
Take care - Dave
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I agree Dave, they are a way of capturing a moment succinctly. Many thanks for your visit. read moreI agree Dave, they are a way of capturing a moment succinctly. Many thanks for your visit.
Haikus are a perfect example of how structure can force a writer to really be precise in word choice in order to capture the moment. This is a lovely glimpse … one that immediately evoked a memory of being along the water on the Blue Ridge Parkway, watching the sun turn the water into molten gold. Beautiful!
that's so lovely and have a tender deep touch of spirituality, I love Water everything and anything about it, and what You've shared with us here is but food for the soul, Thank You dear Chris.
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Dear Light, many thank yous for responding to this little piece of brevity. Sunbeams on water and ye.. read moreDear Light, many thank yous for responding to this little piece of brevity. Sunbeams on water and yet so uplifting. Thank you for your visit.
Albert, my paternal grandfather introduced me to Tennyson when I was nine. I have loved poetry ever since but did not attempt writing a single piece until I was 40. It's never too late to try somethin.. more..