Serenity

More river musings from afloat

South westerly blows welcome breeze

to soothe all willow trees who bake

in August's scorching oven heat.

Across lake's blue I see them sway,

their leafy tease in quiet speak,

on deck I rest my soul replete.

As rippled waters hold a race

of little feathered boats that float

along with algae island's green.

No other place I'd rather be

umbrella shades me from the sun,

content am I till day is done.

When sunset steals the last of light,

when darkness brings the curtain down

and all the wild fowl say goodnight.

Reviews

[Lorry]

Ahh, better than lying on a sandy beach any day, especially if you wear suntan oil and the wind changes, turning you into a doughnut.
This had to be a lazy Sunday, floating the aches of the week away and readying you for another Monday.
Just don't float too far away Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Lorry. It was indeed a Sunday, a very hot one as well and not a grain of sand in sight. Good job for the umbrella or I would have cooked. Thank you and good morning.

Chris

[Lorry]

Afternoon 😀

[Chris Shaw]

Yep, it's afternoon now, have a happy one :)

[Robert Trakofler]

I read this a while ago and wanted to show a picture i took that morning and my phone wouldn't let me so i never finished reviewing this and now im on my computer and it still wont let me send it:) anyway your picture in this write is more lovely anyhow:)

[Chris Shaw]

Bunny you are so thoughtful. Sorry you couldn't post your pic, but I am more than delighted that you tried to do so. Always happy to see your reviews. Hope you have a wonderful Sunday.

Chris

[Robert Trakofler]

you too dear Chris time for me to make the pancakes:) i sent it to you in a PM

[Chris Shaw]

Yummy pancakes :) I'll take a look for the pic Bunny :)

[Barbara Walker]

Love the syntax in this piece. You put me in a wonderful place. I needed that bit of serenity. I was having a difficult time finding my own today. Thank you.

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased to hear that you found a bit of serenity in my poem when you were having a difficult day. Your visit and response are very welcome.

Chris

[Reianna Jewel]

This transported me, and made me wish I was there in your poem soaking up the sun. I love the descriptions, it truly is an amazing piece

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased to meat you Sub Jewell. Thank you for your visit and for your review. I appreciate your thoughts.

Chris

[Davidgeo]

Good title, good poem. If you can describe it pretty nature is so lovely.

On the last line of the second to last stanza... Use "until" instead of "till" because it has a floating phonetic connection to "sunset" via the 'n' and to the end of that first line of the last stanza via alphabetic proximity to the 'l'. Subconsciously those kind of things make a difference almost every time.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you David for taking the time to review this poem and for the suggestion to improve it. Much appreciated.

Chris

[Kelly Scheppers]

Nature astounds me, every day. I go out looking for whatever I can capture on film, and I feel exhilarated when I do. Your river musing sounds like the good life, indeed!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Kelly. I appreciate your thoughts. Hoping all in your world is ok

Chris

[Pete]

i was lulled into a state of calm as i read your beautiful words living every bit of the imagery. you took me away for a spell and for that i am grateful. such a peaceful write, your 'serenity' sings a calming lullaby. thank you for invoking a sense of ease and capturing summer's deep, seasonal gift. ah, what's not to like ... :)

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks for your visit Pete and so pleased to learn that I managed to inject a bit of calm into your world. All good wishes.

Chris

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

We are never more human, more in touch with our soul, then when we are immersed in the quietude and splendor of nature. Like a flower in soil, we cannot help but thrive in nature. Well done.

[Chris Shaw]

Your words full of wisdom and I thank you for your very welcome visit Linda Marie.

Chris

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Ah the gentle wallow
of willow trees crying with
such grace and joy my
favorite of All trees because
they're strong and have no
shame on their sorrows.

I think you have
inspired my muse 😊

Such a peaceful place
to be thank you for sharing.


South westerly blows welcome breeze
to soothe all willow trees who bake
in August's scorching oven heat.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Benita for your lovely review. Your visit much appreciated.

Chris

[emmajoy]

'.. When sunset steals the last of light, .. when darkness brings the curtain down .. '

that has to be the perfect end to a slow, softly beautiful day, Chris..

you've created a place where life is real, where thoughts gentle the man... and to use a cliche, all's well in the world..

perfect, blissful.. large sigh.. thank you

[Chris Shaw]

Yes Em, that was a day of perfect bliss. They don't come along very often. Thank you for your lovely review.

Chris

[barleygirl]

I love how you paint such a variety of scenes in all your poems & never do your details sound similar, always fresh & new! As always, a unique way to immerse the reader in a riverboat experience. Reminds me of growing up by a 15-mile-long lake where noisy ski-boats reigned all summer, but autumn brought the serene rippling kind of boating as you describe here! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Margie. I would have liked your lake in autumn. It would have been too noisy during the summer months. I prefer the quiet. Many thanks for your lovely review..

Chris