This eerie silence will not last
as dawn brings milky smoke-like mist
to haunt our river, hide the view.
A host of ghosts are sweeping through.
Then moments later sol glows gold
the phantoms rise in upward lift.
Before my eyes the scene has changed,
the bank appears now clothed in green,
tall trees emerge to change the scene
and all bodes well, a clear new day.
And the new day emerges with the golden sol breaking free the morning mist. Yes, the smoky mist covering everything with its white clothing and the eerie silence perfectly describes a ghostly ambience but as soon as the golden rays embraces the earth they (ghosts:)) disappears as sun starts to reign the day. The living beings also starts their activity leaving the laziness ghost behind.
How effortlessly you portray the starting of a new day.... Awesome
Posted 3 Years Ago
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3 Years Ago
Thank you dear Sima for your endless encouragement. You are a gem dear friend.
You are very good at finding isolated moments and elucidating their significance. This offering depicts a brief scene on a river at dawn, with rising mists making a brief, ghostlike appearance before the sun evaporates them, leaving a clearer view of that which they concealed. We can relish the delicate, zenlike
scene for what it is, or see it as a metaphor for physical life, ever changing, hiding another reality behind it. Very nicely done.
You must be a morning person, Chris. getting up before sunrise is definitely a habit of the nature lovers.
The wonderful shift of light in moments that brightens our perception of surroundings is wreathed in your poem, it is breathtakingly beautiful. Thank You for always sharing your bewitching experiences of nature with us,
Posted 5 Years Ago
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5 Years Ago
You are a sweetheart Mrudula. Yes when we are boating I wake very early. I love to see the river at .. read moreYou are a sweetheart Mrudula. Yes when we are boating I wake very early. I love to see the river at all times of day, especially when the light changes. Thank you for your lovely review.
Chris
5 Years Ago
It's entirely my pleasure and Ialways a beautiful treat visiting your precious poems . You are a spe.. read moreIt's entirely my pleasure and Ialways a beautiful treat visiting your precious poems . You are a spectacular poet, a gift to WC, Chris.
I LOVE THIS! Great imagery . . . I was seeing the wispy apparitions so clearly! This reminds me of how the ocean fog comes over the high mountains & spills down the ridges above me. I never thought to equate the fog with ghosts, even tho I love ghost tales. Your word-painted scene is very much ALIVE! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Hello Margie, yes the ocean fog would create the same imagery. Wherever you have an expanse of water.. read moreHello Margie, yes the ocean fog would create the same imagery. Wherever you have an expanse of water you are likely to find this scenario. Always spooks me :) Thank you for checking this little write out. We are boating on the river. This took place yesterday morning.
Many a morning started like this on our canoe trips in Northern Ontario. Grey rock...black water...mist swirling off the water...a warming fire and a hot cup of coffee to start the day...the mist rising slowly to reveal green forests...a moose and her calf grazing along the other bank.
Thanks taking me back, Chris.
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5 Years Ago
Hello Ted, your canoe trips sound wonderful. Pleased to take you on a trip down nostalgia Lane. Have.. read moreHello Ted, your canoe trips sound wonderful. Pleased to take you on a trip down nostalgia Lane. Have a good day.
Albert, my paternal grandfather introduced me to Tennyson when I was nine. I have loved poetry ever since but did not attempt writing a single piece until I was 40. It's never too late to try somethin.. more..