Dethroned

(country or sea, or maybe both)

Beside the margins of the bay,

the lazy waves creep in to shore.

Yet those who stayed all day to build

have left their castles knowing they

won't see their splendour anymore.

Their towers stand in twilight sand,

await their turn to disappear,

as lap, lap, lap the gentle calm

of graceful fingers capped with lace

are skirting, skirting ever near.

This Ocean beckons me to stray,

dethroned the thoughts of country green.

Salt water gleams displayed for me,

as sequins stitched on fluid black

lend vistas set in lunar sheen.

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed so descriptive of dusk at the seaside (thats ocean to our brothers and sisters across the pond!). A lovely time and I even recall the disappointment as a child when one had take so much trouble to build the sandcastle to see it begin to erode and collapse. Nice flowing rhyming poem.

[Chris Shaw]

Good afternoon John. Oh, the upset as a kid of having to leave your castle to the incoming tide:) Thanks for your review, fellow castle builder.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

Me too dear Chris.
"This Ocean beckons me to stray,
dethroned the thoughts of country green."
I need a years near the sea. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Coyote. Hope you are well my friend. I am looking forward to a week by the sea. I am recovering from COVID, a nasty visit, I might add. The sea air will do my lungs some good.

Chris

[Neville]

the title here gave no indication or hint as to the beauty that which followed .. indeed such a gentle step back in time and a perfect reminisce .. Neville

[Chris Shaw]

I thank you Neville. Nature is so healing. Whether the country or the ocean it both delights and gifts. Ah those sandcastles of yesteryear, they taught us a thing or two. Have a lovely day.

Chris

[Neville]

My pleasure as always and back at you Chris

Neville

[Jimmy Yetts]

An eloquent classical poem powerfully portraying the ocean's--or time's--incessant erosion.
Other analogies can, of course, be easily drawn.
This strikes me as being poetry of a high order.
Nicely done, poetess!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Jimmy for delving into the archives and giving this oldie a much needed airing. Much appreciated.

Chris

[KeeD]

To leave a world so familiar and drift away with the ocean wind. Castles in the sand, castles on land... all temporary, the ocean comes calling via your words so inviting. Great imagery Ann, makes me just want to write about the sea now. 100/100!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much for visiting these lines of mine Kee. It is wonderful to see you on my page again. Thank you my friend.

Chris

[RuseInex]

such imagery! another gorgeous piece

[Chris Shaw]

You are spoiling me today and I thank you so much Ruselnex for another visit.

Chris

[RuseInex]

yes, i guess i am, it's just that i got caught up in your style and subject matter, wow, i read you bio and how you delayed writing poetry, so glad you have begun, you share a talent with readers that otherwise may not be enjoyed

[gram linski]

Reminds me of beach day sun, laughter and fun,
the sea always stole my sandcastles from me,
and I returned
day after day
all Summer long,

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased this little write brought back some happy for you. Thanks gram for your visit.

Chris

[BlackPrince]

This poem has been masterfully executed! It has great cadence, rhythm and flow and good rhyme structure and overall stanza layout.
It's filled with knowledge and wisdom.

Well done!!!

[Chris Shaw]

Happy BlackPrince that you enjoyed these lines. Many thanks for reading.

Chris

[Lydia Shutter]

I so enjoy walking along the shoreline as the sun goes down and the sandcastles of the day disappear into the ocean. Your imagery here is superb, Chris. There is a magical feel to watching the ocean as the sun sets. You captured that with your words. Almost a melancholy feel. Wonderful. Lydi**

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Lydi**. I share your love for beach walking at sunset or even sunrise. A great way to either start or end a day. Really appreciate your review. Many thanks.

Chris

[Jon Roggie]

This brings back childhood memories. Ocean trips were few, so they are great memories. I love your description of the scene.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Jon, how lovely to see a review from you. Hope all is good with you. Many thanks for your visit.

Chris