When Night Calls Time On Day

What happens to the sinking sun

when night calls time on day?

Does he wave to say goodnight

before he slips away?

Does he shout his shifts all done,

then weary from the heat,

discards his sweaty yellow shirt

and the sandals on his feet?

Does he take a cooling bath

after he shaves his head?

Then gives his Mum a night, night kiss

as he gets into bed?

And does he rest his squeak clean cheeks

on pillows edged with lace,

clicks the switch of a bedside lamp

with a smile upon his face?

Then finally a lullaby

could soothe him into sleep,

but turn him first upon his side

his snores will make you weep.

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

Ah, that lucky old sun...better watch out...the climate changers will be working on ways to close him down.
Would rather feel the heat than deal with the cold.
Although, there is something to be said about walking a country lane in the moonlight.

A good one, Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Ted, written for kids, but happy if big kids enjoyed it as well. Hope all is good with you.

Chris

[Ted Kniffen]

You know, I always said I'd like to live to 90 & have people say 'when is he going to grow up'.
read moreYou know, I always said I'd like to live to 90 & have people say 'when is he going to grow up'.
I'm pretty good...although I did blow out my left elbow last week...now the whole arm is one big bruise and there's a golf ball hanging off my elbow.

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved this poem.
"Then finally a lullaby
could soothe him into sleep,
but turn him first upon his side
his snores will make you weep."
The above lines. Perfect closing. Thank you dear Chris for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Coyote, so pleased you enjoyed this fun write. All good wishes.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy the poem. Like a Native American tale, it fell into proper place, the words and you are welcome dear Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Have a lovely day Coyote, it must be very early where you are.

[Stella Armour]

A lovely refreshing change Chris, not too many poems to smile about being posted here lately.

I always wondered if the sun was just really playing hide and seek with the moon :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Stella. Another one from the archives. Amazing what you can find when you go routing around :) Pleased it made you smile.

Chris

[Stella Armour]

it did indeed, i might post a silly poem myself as it is so dull on here :))))

[Chris Shaw]

It's nice to be able to create smiles. I've got an ode to a toadstool, which kept growing, super size it was :)

[Stella Armour]

hahaha ... was yiu siting on it ?

I have just posted a load of nonesense ... see if it raise a smile :)

[Chris Shaw]

Will take a look :)

[john l smith]

I really like this
At first, I wondered why I found it so appealing and then I see you mention it was meant for children, which explains why!
I enjoyed my raucous childhood so much I decided to never grow up.
About the only part, I don't like is the ending because I would like it to keep on a-goin.
Could you add another 46 or 47 stanzas (is that what they are called?)?

[Chris Shaw]

Aw Dave only another 46 or so stanzas? That put a smile on my face I can tell you. Maybe a sequel is called for?

Chris

[John the Baptist]

Delightful rhyming and images here. It would make a great nursery rhyme. I don't know about the snoring part, though. I say better his snores than his spots.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks John for your response to this childish fun.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

his shift is done, and the moon is punching in...
i , like the sun...sleep on my side...
don't need that weeping.
clever and fun write, Chris,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Jacob. A bit of fun, a bit of sun and some warmth. We all need that in our lives.

read moreThanks Jacob. A bit of fun, a bit of sun and some warmth. We all need that in our lives.

Chris

[lizardbrain]

sweet poem Chris :) some of my favorite writing is that which makes me wonder things I've never wondered before, even if (and sometimes especially) they're quite silly! love it

[Chris Shaw]

It's good to do silly every now and again. We all need fun and silly on an ever serious planet earth. Many thanks lizardbrain for your visit.

Chris

[Crowley]

It is all those I think and more. You have described perfectly one of the times that is most desirous for me. So Many possibilities.... loved this.

[Chris Shaw]

Why thank you Crowley. Pleased you could see so many possibilities in these lines. Happy for your visit.

Chris

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I love your playful words as you ponder a question that will never be answered. You get the reader thinking while putting a smile on their face.

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Dale, pleased these lines put a smile on your face. Thank you for your response. Hope all is good with you.

Chris

[Bare trees]

Nice personification in this, Chris. The second verse is my favorite. :)

[Chris Shaw]

A name change no less. Thank you so much, p;eased you enjoyed the read.

Chris

[Bare trees]

It's always been Palewriter for many years on this account. ha You're welcome, Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Good that I know :))