Finale

Here comes the wash of tidal flow,

full moon glow on a starlit night,

your tepid touch returns to me.

A light caress on freckled skin,

impressed by charm and caught with ease.

Convinced that love would break my fall,

my knees were weak, I do recall

struck down with their belief in you.

But unsuspecting grew to gloom,

no room in your sad swell for me.

A sailboat drifts in open sea.

Consumed by fear, I begged my dear

afloat in my own misery,

afraid of life and so alone.

You have the gall to reappear,

tears and years have passed, you're back.

A lack of thought shown on your part,

a move I don't consider smart.

How shallow you now seem in dreams,

my small white sails ripped at the seams,

yet now restored to billow free.

I stand and stare,your eyes remain

a liquid, hazel flecked with brown.

You played the clown so brilliantly.

And I no longer weakened by

your spell or buried in its hell

have learned to sing without your song

resisting you, I've grown too strong.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i must be so infiltrated lately with thoughts of Sylvia...in ways, she could have written this.
How she ran into him after the split...how he still enticed her...how she still loved his writing...and still felt the connection so strong, and then how she finally weaned herself off of that need for him...grew strong enough on her own to get the divorce....but maybe she was only lying to herself...maybe in the end...he was still the stronger force and her broken wings could not be repaired...
anyway...where i am right now, this is how the poem spoke to me...even though, surely, the intent or thoughts of the writer were probably in a totally different direction.
j.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

This is an oldie from the archives Jacob. Like you, I find Sylvia is still hovering these last few days, so I can see where my lines took you. I like that very much. Thank you.

Chris

[gram linski]

Great poem, Chris you tell a story well, remorse, regret, and f**k off ya fat b*****d I have moved on, lol,

[Chris Shaw]

I love your review, with that fat kick at the end of it :) Thank you gram.

Chris

[Dave]

I'm really not familiar with Sylvia. So I read this on your own merits and I like it very much.
I read of a woman who was very much in love and then scarred by it. Hurt though she was, she not only survived and became stronger. Upon his return from a long absence she is strong enough to resist his attempts to lure her back. - I'd love to know if I'm right in my interpretation.

Take care - Dave

[Chris Shaw]

Dave your interpretation is both spot on for Sylvia and many like her. Thank you

Chris

[Dave]

Chris - thank you for the feed back.
Have a great day - take care - Dave

[Chris Shaw]

And you too Dave. All good things.

[lizardbrain]

this poem is an inspiration to me as I tend to forgive old heartbreak and give a few too many second chances.. something I hope to grow out of as I become a stronger person. Love this one Chris and thank you for the inspiration and hope

[Chris Shaw]

Dear lizardbrain, thanks so much for your visit and review. Forgiveness is good, but there are limits where you need to grow your own strength.

Chris

[Robert Trakofler]

damn avast ye scurvy dogs when you do cutting you tear with tears! but the exit in triumph is all a warming smile from me my fair freckled rhyme queen! as usual great rhythm and rhyme. I kinda feel sorry for the poor guy that lost your attention after reading this one

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Bunny. He got his just desserts. Maybe a lesson for life that you don't trifle with people's feelings and take advantage of their good nature. Always good to see ya.

Chris

[free spirit]

Hi... I love the message of strength conveyed at the end of the poem... Yes, most definitely heartbreak can bring us to our knees, like the saying goes, I've been there, done that...
But that feeling of being free from the shackles of the past is something extraordinary..
Your poem gives alot of hope to that...
Well written, as always...

Take care and blessings to you...

[Chris Shaw]

Your visit free spirit much appreciated. All good wishes to you.

Chris

[Onlyme]

What a superb write Chris, you really bright Sylvia alive with your words.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Dawn for your visit.

Chris

[J. B.]

this is such a great piece, and I'm happy to hear that you've grown from the heart-break. I loved the symbolism you used, and the meter of the piece was also simple, but flowing. great work! :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much JB. I really appreciate your thoughts. All good wishes.

Chris

[Ranger Kessel]

You have brought Sylvia's story to light for me and I am thankful. I hadn't known of this previously. A lovely write. Thanks as always for sharing

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Ranger for your visit. Most appreciated.

Chris

[Richard🖌]

Oh, Chris! 🍂
How sad this wonderfully rendered Free Style is (with its intermittent rhymes) … how very true to life and romance, too.
Once the flame of love has flickered-out, it's almost impossible to rekindle it -- even if one wants to, and you, obviously, didn't.
Still, love often dies reluctantly, leaving one wishing things could have turned out differently … while, all the time, being just as glad to move along, as you so deftly exemplified in your revealing "Finale" verse.
Smooth flow, vividly creative metaphor, spot-on line-breaks, and rhymes highlight your poetic skills, making for a genuinely enjoyable experience for all levels and genre of readers.

I'm always taken by your excellent poetic mastery and deep-hearted pieces … a big thank you hug! ⁓ Richard 🍃

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Richard, many thanks for your visit and your thoughtful response. It is lovely to hear from you and I hope you are both well and happy. All good wishes.

Chris

[Richard🖌]

Always a pleasure, Chris. : )

[Stella Armour]

i didn't really enjoy the workf Sylvia or Ted , so i read this from a personal level.

I can relate the drifting and how it was to keep afloat, then the sudden swell of strength sweeping through from nowhere, climbing aboard that safety raft which took me to new horizons. Oh how strength can grow within and help us to rise again... how dare those that undermined us then ask for forgiveness .... NEVER !