Room With A View

You promised me a sunset,

a view of pastel hues.

Soft candied pinks and violets

between the gold and blues.

No finer gift was given

of shades both dark and light,

as dusk brings down its curtains

and day paves way for night.

I'm grateful for the giving,

my thoughts conveyed and spoken.

I wish we could have shared it,

these words a simple token.

Reviews

[Neville]

some of the most beautiful gestures are simple ones .. that is maybe why it smarts so very much when the goods are not delivered .... perhaps ....... tokens eh' who would have em .. how beautifully portrayed our Chris.

Neville

[Chris Shaw]

I had a photograph sent to me once Neville of a beautiful sunset which I wished I could have shared. A token gesture much appreciated, just as this poem was meant to be to the sender. Tokens are a thoughtful expression of high regard. As a token of my appreciation for you finding this much buried write I am sending you a flower from my garden 🌸

Have a beautiful Sunday

Chris

[Neville]

........... thanks a bunch 💐🌻🌷🌹🥀💮🌸🌺💐

[YouoweYoupay]

The first stanza instantly caught my attention. A promise of a sunset. It was fun to imagine all the colors and shades of the sky. The story in the poem tells that of two lovers, who perhaps had a plan of living together in a house that looks on a nice view, thus the title. But the speaker is left alone to observe a beautiful painting. "I wish we could have shared it," but they did not. Has one of them called the relationship off? Or was it death? It was interesting to imagine the possible outcomes.
"Soft candied pinks and violets
between the gold and blues.
No finer gift was given
of shades both dark and light,.."

Just some of my favorite lines.
Thanks for posting.

Never stop writing!

~Aysha.

[Chris Shaw]

What a beautiful response for me to read Aysha. Your thoughts truly welcome and delightful. Your presence here very much appreciated. Thank you so much for your visit.

Chris

[kentuck14]

I love the extended metaphor here, Chris. It's sad that that we don't always get to enjoy the gifts with the giver. I guess it's just one more condition of life we don't really understand. This poem runs deep. Even poetry lovers sometimes fear to dive that deep for fear of never coming up.
Thanks for the write.
Tom

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Tom. This was about a photograph I had been given of a sunset. It was a gift, so you hit the nail on the head there. All good wishes.

Chris

[kentuck14]

I, myself, have written a number of poems because of photos.
T.

[gram linski]

A beautiful sunset, tinged by a halo ,of loss, hope it hasn't put you off sunsets

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you. Nothing could put me off sunsets. Thank you for checking in gram linski. I appreciate your visit.

Chris

[sarahsara]

This is beautiful Chris thanks for sharing.xxx

[Chris Shaw]

Many thank yous. I do appreciate you visiting my page.

Chris

[Robert Trakofler]

Holy smokes Chris... (you ARE a sunset by the way!) in security and surety of that knowledge I can say with absolute certainty the loss is there's! As usual your Rhythm & Rhyme is flawless and sincere as is the imagery and symbolism. Very nicely written and I'm sorry for your sadness Bunny hug to you (I do love your window)

[Chris Shaw]

Aw Bunny, you say the sweetest things. Sadness never lasts long, but it makes a good subject for poetry. I am so pleased to see you here.

Chris

[Davidgeo]

Reminds me of a divorce.

Anyway... regardless

The rhythm you compose your poems with is lovely. Objectively lovely.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you David for your response.

Chris

[Papaya]

I'd happily share a sunset and sunrise with you and share a bit about life so we moon gaze the hours in between. Your poem is beautiful of course.

[Chris Shaw]

What a lovely response Ana. That would be most enjoyable. Many thanks.

Chris

[goldenscar__]

His loss. May your sunset be better than his.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thank yous for responding. I appreciate your visit.

Chris

[goldenscar__]

you're welcome.

[Dave]

Chris - how often the promises and the dreams fall short. The important thing, I think. is the intent. Were they made knowing there was no chance the person making them would fulfill them or were they initially said with sincerity.

Take care - Dave

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Dave. Hope all is good with you. Thank you so much for your response.

Chris