Salt On Open Wounds

Those nine carat gold hoops

twisted with betrayal

have remained unused and pushed

in their satin lined, expensive

salt on open wounds leather case

to the back of a dark drawer

where they'll stay buried forever.

When he presented them to her,

he would have seen the expression in her eyes.

"I bought them with you in mind", he said.

But she in her infinite wisdom replied,

"You did nothing of the kind,

you'd be a fool if you think my eyes 

are blind to your treachery".

Reviews

[Lorry]

Ouch! Typical amateur mistake Chris, should have buried him in the back of a dark drawer instead.
The selfishness of the male ego knows no bounds. I am ashamed to be a part of that species sometimes....but then again, im usually just grateful that some woman hasn't decided to kill me, yet.
I might not deserve it for that reason, but im probably guilty of something.
It really is a wonder you've not all gone lesbian when uou look at the mounting evidence that we are indeed from mars.

[Chris Shaw]

Men are from Mars, Women from Venus and inbetween us the Planet Penis. That's what it all boils down to Lorry. Come to think of it, there do appear to be more lesbians around these days. I haven't gone that far yet :) Love your review. I also do like men despite the faults of some.

Chris

[Lorry]

Trump would make a great president of planet penis, being the biggest dick on this planet :)

[Chris Shaw]

I can 't argue with you there. You are giving me some ideas for a possible poem :)

[¿]

Men are great...tis just that some cunning creatures wear a skin resembling to men's skin and continue playing with hearts, flesh, minds and what not!..
Salt on open wounds are one of the worst feelings ever I've been through...
I'm happy that you added her bravery at the end here....Great read =)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Tahsin for your visit. Good to see you here. All good wishes.

Chris

[ROSALIND]

Brilliant cleverly written piece

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Rosalind for your visit. Most appreciated.

Chris

[Ranger Kessel]

Nice write. I like the forwardness of the declaration. I hope you are well.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Ranger for checking in. All good with me, I wish the same for you.

Chris

[Papaya]

oh wow, this cuts.
I know this betrayal so well.
well written, chris

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Ana. Yes it stinks doesn't it? Quite cathartic though to write about it even long after the event :)

Chris

[Papaya]

yes, cathartic.... :)
it's the main reason that I write!

[Chris Shaw]

Even years after the event you still get satisfaction :) Keep that pen flowing.

[Tony]

Dude thought he could pull a fast one by flashing some gold, but true gold is in the heart. And a heart of gold is shown through the things we do.

[Chris Shaw]

Dude was made to suffer. Thanks for checking this one out Tony Mak.

Chris

[Dave]

If women were only as stupid as men thought, or wished. Hah! My experience has led me to believe that girls, women, come out of the delivery room knowing what the game is. Boys, men, only begin to know and when they think they do, they are usually wrong. What an interesting tournament we all play. The women are smart, and they usually will win and if they're really smart they'll let the guys think that they are the ones who actually won.

Take care - Dave

[Chris Shaw]

Dave, you are the wisest bloke I've come across. You know the score. Thanks for checking in :))
read moreDave, you are the wisest bloke I've come across. You know the score. Thanks for checking in :))

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

Some people believe they are smarter than everyone. Then one day. lies and more lies become twisted. Sooner or later. A liar is found-out and true face seen. Like the poem. Salt on a open wound. Ensure we feel the pain and know when to say goodbye. Powerful words and thoughts shared dear Chris.
Coyote

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Coyote for your words of wisdom. Those who think they are smartest, seldom are.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right dear Chris and you are welcome.

[lightsong]

I didn't expect it to be like this, and Your brilliance shines here so brightly dear Chris though the theme is bitterly painful as bitterness and pain can be, not enough that she had to deal with his betrayal but also with him playing her fool, make her feel stupid! this is the worst! more of his "expensive" salt on her wounds! so strong my friend, the title and what lays behind it which I admire the most.

[Chris Shaw]

Just stretching my versatility in writing Light. Happy to see you here. Take good care dear friend.

Chris

[NotUsinganymore]

Very beautiful and unique descriptions! I enjoyed it a lot, had a nice feeling to it. c:

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you JungLee. Revenge can oft leave a nice feeling of sweetness about it.

Chris

[KeeD]

I really like how I could see the scene play out in front of my eyes. You burn the image of a woman hurt right into my brittle soul and I really feel this piece. Great write.

[Chris Shaw]

Hello lovely Kee. Hope you are good. A delight to see you again after a too long gap. Hope all is OK with you.

Chris