Payback

Don't ask

She can scratch with her long, boney fingers,

she can linger unwelcome outside.

She can freeze in the frost of harsh winter,

not a tear will I shed from my eyes.

While I sit by the logs of my fire

with a glass of the finest red wine,

I will scoff at the threats that she proffers

and consign her to hell with all swine.

Reviews

[Lorry]

The opening lines lead me to the harshness of winter, but with the title, I am going for either a frienf who really wasn't, or a T word. (shh! Take those heels off when crossing bridges, for fear of them waling) :)
I remember a much simpler time, when trolls were nothing more than grinning, fuzzy-headed pencil jewellery. Who knew those little tykes would grow up into complete arseholes? :)
Just you enjoy that wine and know that hers will taste of tears and bitter regret.

[Chris Shaw]

Ah Lorry, can you remember three billy goats gruff too, trying to cross the bridge and that troll de ol, hiding underneath it. Well they still exist, but fortunately this little story is an old one. I found this little bit of revenge in the archives and thought, did you really write that? I sort of liked it's kick in the teeth, so thought I might give it an airing.

Have a great week-end.
Chris

[Lorry]

Remember it? My house was at the other side of s bridge from school. And I went home for lunch, so four times a day I held my breath and ran like the bionic man across it. I swear we must have been read it once a week...probably becaise it was the one thing that shut us up :)

[Chris Shaw]

I still think of the troll when I cross bridges sometimes. You know some of those stories, especially Grimms fairy tales should have been x rated. The Red Shoes gave me nightmares. If I stopped dancing while wearing them, the axe man would cut my feet off (lol) It'a a wonder any of us grew up normal :) .

[NotUsinganymore]

Interesting poem, I enjoted it. Some people are just so spiteful and you can only get down at their level.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you JungLee. Yes there is spiteful in my lines, aimed to give a little kick. Not the usual me at all. I must have been rattled and turned into a snake. Thank you for calling.

Chris

[NotUsinganymore]

Interesting!

[Robert Trakofler]

Damn straight sister!!! I get the feeling you are rarely angry but when you are... watch out! which is in fact much like me! Oh by the way nicely evil this write

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Bunny. How right you are, I rarely get angry, but I do admit to liking a bit of retribution. Words can be so spiteful can't they? Thank you for you visit.

Chris

[Anjeline]

My instant reaction after reading it was- cool man😀. But it's really good and besides being a correct payback for a cheat it also taught me that we should not care much and waste our time and emotions on people who don't care for us, as life is beautiful and is meant to be enjoyed with our loved ones and friends. I really found it good and refreshing. Have a wonderful Sunday 😊

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Anjeline. I find your response equally refreshing. Pleased you enjoyed the read.
read moreThank you Anjeline. I find your response equally refreshing. Pleased you enjoyed the read.

Chris

[Anjeline]

You're welcome :)

[Mrudula Rani]

Your resolve not to lift a finger to aid this creature is very strong, at the same time speaks quite dignity and tranquillity of mind, that shows classy character. This is such different subject to write about and the style you choose to express your mind is aptly suited. I am always amazed at your writing talents chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thank yous Mrudula and your lovely comments. Always pleased to see you visit my page. All good wishes.

Chris

[Mrudula Rani]

you are most welcome. It's always a great pleasure to read your marvelous writings, Chris.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

She wanted to be like you
But she could never be
You’re a poet so fine, you shine
She’s just a petty wannabe

All sorts of people exist everywhere, dear Chris. I had my share of wily old predators and sly operators. Just forget the bad incident Chris. Move on with those who love and care for you 🐱

[Chris Shaw]

Here kitty, kitty. My favourite cat visiting me. Nothing to worry about Ditzy. I found this bit of sweet revenge in the archives and liked its punch, so it's out for a week-end airing. Good and bad everywhere I say. I'm outta milk, but next time I'll be sure to have cat treats:)

Chris

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I'm back with a bang dear Chris! No worries. I'm off milk for a while but a bit of cheese will do just fine! You're so kind always :)

[AYVID N]

You deserve the warm hearth and the finest wine, dear Chris. You’re an asset to this site and such a joy to have as a friend. I can’t believe there exist people who can do this to you. They must be utterly rotten inside.

The poem rocks! The rhyme adds to the power of your words here. I love your different pen here. Yet as awesome as always!

May you only find love and friendship hence, as you so richly deserve!

[Chris Shaw]

Hello lovely DIVYA. This is an old poem, but when I read it again I quite liked it's punch. Long time ago but I thought I'd give it an airing. It also gave me a certain satisfaction :) Many thank yous and have a great week-end.

Chris

[Relic]

Winter sucks. We've never been friends agter I reached the age of 17 when he blew a wicked wind in my face and has ever since.

[Chris Shaw]

I don't like winter either Tim. Haven't seen you around for a while. Thanks for checking this one out and I hope all is OK with you.

Chris

[john l smith]

Well if that doesn't get the message across, nothing will!!
But those poor little (big) swine

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Dave. Have to admit I wasn't thinking of little piggies when I wrote this. Have a good week-end my friend.

Chris

[Stella Armour]

Karma has its own way of settling scores ....

[Chris Shaw]

It does indeed Stella. What goes round comes round. That is a very satisfying thought. Thank you for checking this one out. Happy to say this isn't my normal style, but it was fun to do.

Chris

[Stella Armour]

Sometimes writing these thoughts down is very cathartic ..

[Chris Shaw]

That is very true Stella. Did you get snow today?

[Stella Armour]

just a very light dusting that lasted for about half an hour,; how about you?

[Chris Shaw]

About four inches, most of it still with us. A very cold day today.

[Stella Armour]

when i was young we used to get lots of very deep snow and the south hardly got any, now it seems the other way round and we never get much. When my first baby was born the neighbours had a dig a path out for the midwife to get through but now we never get much snow at all.

[Chris Shaw]

I can still remember the winter of 1963 when the snow came in December and lasted till March. The river froze and we all went skating on it. Now that was a harsh winter.

[Stella Armour]

We had those such a lot, it was normal then in my part of the world , large icicles and frozen lakes ... but now ... nothing of the sort lol.