Payback

Don't ask

She can scratch with her long, boney fingers,

she can linger unwelcome outside.

She can freeze in the frost of harsh winter,

not a tear will I shed from my eyes.

While I sit by the logs of my fire

with a glass of the finest red wine,

I will scoff at the threats that she proffers

and consign her to hell with all swine.

Reviews

[Lorry]

The opening lines lead me to the harshness of winter, but with the title, I am going for either a frienf who really wasn't, or a T word. (shh! Take those heels off when crossing bridges, for fear of them waling) :)
I remember a much simpler time, when trolls were nothing more than grinning, fuzzy-headed pencil jewellery. Who knew those little tykes would grow up into complete arseholes? :)
Just you enjoy that wine and know that hers will taste of tears and bitter regret.

[Chris Shaw]

Ah Lorry, can you remember three billy goats gruff too, trying to cross the bridge and that troll de ol, hiding underneath it. Well they still exist, but fortunately this little story is an old one. I found this little bit of revenge in the archives and thought, did you really write that? I sort of liked it's kick in the teeth, so thought I might give it an airing.

Have a great week-end.
Chris

[Lorry]

Remember it? My house was at the other side of s bridge from school. And I went home for lunch, so four times a day I held my breath and ran like the bionic man across it. I swear we must have been read it once a week...probably becaise it was the one thing that shut us up :)

[Chris Shaw]

I still think of the troll when I cross bridges sometimes. You know some of those stories, especially Grimms fairy tales should have been x rated. The Red Shoes gave me nightmares. If I stopped dancing while wearing them, the axe man would cut my feet off (lol) It'a a wonder any of us grew up normal :) .

[Wild Rose]

If you are meaning the weather > wind rain & snow - oh and the frost

I will happily join you with a glass of your "Finest Red" or a dram (or two) of "The Golden Water of Life"

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Wild Rose. The poem can mean anything to you that you want. You the reader, decides that. A whiskey tipple it is then

Chris

[Wild Rose]

Yes we have visited one or two distilleries The Water of Life they call it > at least in the highlands

A Scots lad I worked with used to drink a whiskey with a beer chaser > WHY? we asked

If you drink whiskey on it own you are drunk before you are full
If you drink beer on its you are full before you are drunk
If you drink beer and whiskey together you get drunk and full together and go home happy

If you ever get up there (Speyside Nr Aberlour) and visit the Glenfidich distillery > Free with a film show and guided tour. followed with a taste and a smell of some 75 year old Very expensive the free smell was all they allowed = NO second smell

[Chris Shaw]

I have visited Scotland. For a while my parents lived there. My Dad always had a whisky chaser with his beer. I can understand the logic behind it, although it still makes me smile.

[kentuck14]

Sounds like you are no lover of winter, Chris.

You are very good at your rhymes.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Tom. You are right, I don't like the lack of light. I am looking forward to spring. Thanks for the compliment.

Chris

[kentuck14]

Just calling it as I see it!

[Chris Shaw]

My work is always open to interpretation. I am very happy with your review. Poetry is owned by the reader :)

[kentuck14]

Yeah,
Once someone reads it off the page (or screen) it's no longer yours!

[Onlyme]

They say never piss a lady off. As she sure will come after you with a vengeance. Sounds like someone has really pissed you off Chris. Go get them MY LADY.

[Chris Shaw]

Long time ago Dawn. Dragged this one out of the archives. Thanks for the visit. An uncharacteristic write I might add :)

Chris

[Onlyme]

Hay Chris, we all get times like that, when we need to get it off our chest. Good on you Chris.

[Coyote Poetry]

Payback. Sometime good with wine and a nice fire. I liked your thoughts and I wanted more. Always a pleasure to read your words dear Chris.
Coyote

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Coyote. Pleased you enjoyed. All good wishes.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Chris.

[Papaya]

this creates a rather eerie scene and i'm thinking of mother nature and her mood swings. sometimes nice and sometimes not so. currently she is not so around here

that said, it really could be any demon scratching to get into your mind so drink up (and pay no mind)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Ana. No one could ever put me of a glass of decent vino lol. Thank for your thoughts.
read moreThank you Ana. No one could ever put me of a glass of decent vino lol. Thank for your thoughts.

Chris

[Fran Marie]

Hell hath no fury..this seems to be a somebody done somebody wrong poem
Let old bony fingers freeze outside..enjoy the wine and warmth inside

Nice work

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Fran Marie for your review. Good to see you. Best wishes.

Chris

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Beware the wrath of a fine poet! Whoever is witching around your icy front door had better know who she is dealing with. You are an eloquent gangsta-girl Chris and your wordage is fierce! The imagery is chillingly spectral and cuts like the winter wind. You are an angry Poe-etess with a ghoulish Raven knocking. Your words and spot-on rhyme are unsheathed to slash her “long, boney fingers”, as you consign her to hell Evermore. You got thismy friend!

[Chris Shaw]

Many thank yous Annette. A little bit of sweet revenge here. One from the archives and written a long time ago. Out for an airing.

Chris

[Amada]

This is amazing and short piece of writing. I really enjoyed it.
Sometimes I also think I should also write poems like this.
At last it s amazing.
Thanks Christine for sharing.
😊😊😊

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Rahul for your lovely review. Pleased to see you visit. All good wishes

Chris

[Amada]

Always welcome ma'am 😊 😊 😊

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, as someone who was trolled for quite some time by the lovely people on here ;P I wish I had thought of writing something like this at that time lol. This definitely packs a punch at the right places and I love the tone you used here :)
Cool piece of writing, Christine :)

[Chris Shaw]

You too Dr Y. Mine was a long time ago but I had great delight penning and posting this. Thank you :)

Chris