Sun Kisses

She's not too pleased that she's been teased

by boys, who like to have their fun.

It's not her fault that she's been caught

by sunbeams in the noon-day sun.

And there exposed upon her nose

(retrousse*), is a tiny trail

of specks and flecks, the sun's delight,

left on her skin, once winter pale.

"Now don't you fret my little pet",

says Father to his fair of face,

"Those kisses for my pretty miss

are like the stars in outer space".

"They're quite unique, forget your pique

and learn to love your freckles well,

then teasing boys can stew or queue

with those enchanted by your spell.

* pronounced retroussay (French) for tilting up

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

You really know how to tell a story with your poetry; without stretching things out. And you utilize a very deeply nuanced vocabulary that either takes purposeful research or an innate intelligence to wield. It's really quite impressive how you do it so consistently. I don't review you enough, but, I promise that's a good thing. (your friends here would start to hate you)

[Chris Shaw]

I enjoyed your review David. Thanks for your visit.

Chris

[Neville]

Mon deu notre Chris quel petit poème splendide tu as écrit ici .. Un vrai bijou et à plus d’un titre 🍷💜

[Chris Shaw]

Merci beaucoup monsieur 💜🍷You are spoiling me today :)

[Lanny]

Such an enjoyable read, and the storyline is enchanting. The clever exposure of the freckles is a nice touch as is your ongoing talent for rich imagery, "a tiny trail of specks and flecks". The rhyme and rhythm you engage generates the true tempo for this light-hearted tale. Spectacular creation!

All the best,

Lanny

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks for your visit Lanny. Pleased you enjoyed this poem. All the best.

Chris

[Robert Trakofler]

love love love it! love the cadance, love the use of words!

[Chris Shaw]

Now that'what I call a result Bad bunny. Many thanks and welcome to my page. I appreciate your visit.

Chris

[BeckyC]

Lovely well rounded piece with strong imagery

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you kindly BeckyC. I appreciate your visit.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i happen to think freckles are very very sexy...:)))

[Chris Shaw]

That will do very nicely Jacob. Thank you :))

Chris

[john l smith]

This is another wonderful write that is made to look so easy.
Actually I quite like the freckle look

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Dave, strict rhyme and meter is never easy, even if it looks that way. When I wrote these lines, they were revised many times. Pleased to hear you are a freckle fan :)

Chris

[CD Campbell]

I must say this is excellent work. I thought of my 11 year old daughter who has more freckles than the milky way and a quarter size dark birthmark just below her neck line. It's nice to relate to a piece of poetry without feeling like your an observer on the sidelines. You make writing meter look easy.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you CD. There is nothing easy about writing meter. It takes a great deal of work. Nice you can relate to this poem. All good wishes.

Chris

[CD Campbell]

I know. It's also easy to get savaged by the meter nazis if you mess up just a bit. Have a good day.

[Chris Shaw]

And you too :))

[Akshy]

Woah,this is so beautiful,great work:)

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks for your response. Pleased to meet you on my page Akshy. All good wishes.

Chris

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Ah, those freckles. As someone who lives in the East, it's of course not common here but we do get the other raw deal of having the sun and being tanned a lot lol
I found this one enjoyable as well as a lesson for parents to boost up their kids with what they have. And beautifully laid in your style of writing. :)

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Dr Y for your lovely review. Hope all is good in your world.

Chris