For Mija who wanted to write a poem before she died

( Written after watching the Korean film Poetry)

Soft summer drizzle on your skin,

you sit reflecting life and years.

No tears, though rainfall dews your cheeks,

absorbed in sadness, shame and fears.

These quiet moments, you alone.

A harvest ripened from the grain.

A crop of sorrow gathered there,

stored in your barn of inner pain.

Grey river coldly hurries by,

an empty page, the words won't play

and only drops of heavy rain

will leave their wretched mark this day.

Yet deep within your poet's soul,

your undeserving torment builds.

The feelings that you'll soon express,

about to blast across the fields.

And when they do, that's when we'll see

you've found your voice in poetry.

Reviews

[Ayvid N]

Mija had such sadness, shame and fear in her and that makes for powerful poetry.
You sketch her with sublime strokes of emotion and empathy and in beautiful rhyming and meter.
"A crop of sorrow gathered there,
stored in your barn of inner pain." ~ I'm awed by these lines....Such awesome poetry!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you DIVYA. The film was awesome. If you get a chance and you don't mind sub titles, you won't be disappointed. Well worth viewing. Always appreciate your thoughtful reviews. Have aively day.

Chris

[john l smith]

I doubt I will see the film either but that was another extremely well presented piece, another of your many!!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you John for your visit. Much appreciated.

Chris

[Gee]

I know nothing of the film and no doubt will never watch it but that detracts nowt from this beautifully penned piece. I think you could fill a book Christine and folk would pay to read you.
Hope you are well.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Gee. That's a fine compliment you have paid me.

Chris

[Gee]

Tis the truth....

[¿]

Your poem is really smooth to read....like I just read it and and felt how softly it touched my heart...
Each stanza was a satisfying read!...poetry produces cryptic peace inside us and a fine barrier to convey our notions....I love this one, Chris...thanks for sharing and be blessed! :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Tahsin. I appreciate your kind response.

Chris

[¿]

Welcome! Your excellency!!🙇

[Crowley]

Like Neville, you have my interest piqued about the fil. Isn't this the way it happens for all of us...lol. What a beautiful way to put it and you certainly found yours in a big way!!

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Crowley. Great film, well worth viewing.

Chris

[barleygirl]

This is exquisite! I love everything, the rhyme, rhythm, imagery, storyline moving toward a light-filled promise. I love the contrast between lightness and heaviness in your message (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Chris Shaw]

Margie, thank you. When you've got your internet sorted, watch the movie Poetry, it's on u tube. Sub titles, but it is an absolute treat.

Chris

[Mark]

Very often it's the pain, that propels one into their art whether it be poetry or painting or what have you. I've heard it said that " Art is a support system for Life ". Nicely written piece.

Mark

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Mark, pleased to meet you. If you watch the film Poetry, what you have just written as a response you will see play out in the drama of the film. A treat to watch.

Chris

[Papaya]

I don't know the film but your poem is lovely, with a grain of hope.
And sometimes a grain is all you need.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Ana, go find the film on u tube. You'll be in for a treat.

Chris

[Papaya]

I will for sure :)

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I have seldom come across a voice so in touch with its poetic soul. The third verse has great impact. I commend your poetic voice. Great poetry!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Dhara for that lovely compliment. It is very much appreciated.

Chris

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

It is a great poem, captures the sorrow and pain you still feel. Most welcome.

[Einstein Noodle]

wonderful tribute ..very natural rhyme and rhythm .. classic form that always feels "comfortable" ... really like the metaphors .. strong and clear ... V2 and 3 especially speak to me ..now off to check out the movie
E.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Mr E. I do hope you have been able to check out that movie. It is a treat to watch. Thank you so much for your visit.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

its a long one..i watched the trailer ... will have to make time for sure ... very relatable ... dementia of all kinds afflict most all families i wager to guess :( ... not an easy road for any

[Chris Shaw]

Save it for a rainy day when you have more time. Not just about dementia, much focuses on Mija's wayward grandson and the shame he brings to her.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful, gentle and kind words written for Mija, dear Chris. I like the Asia movies. Always something to drawn you in. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Coyote. It is a truly wonderful film.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Chris.