For Mija who wanted to write a poem before she died

( Written after watching the Korean film Poetry)

Soft summer drizzle on your skin,

you sit reflecting life and years.

No tears, though rainfall dews your cheeks,

absorbed in sadness, shame and fears.

These quiet moments, you alone.

A harvest ripened from the grain.

A crop of sorrow gathered there,

stored in your barn of inner pain.

Grey river coldly hurries by,

an empty page, the words won't play

and only drops of heavy rain

will leave their wretched mark this day.

Yet deep within your poet's soul,

your undeserving torment builds.

The feelings that you'll soon express,

about to blast across the fields.

And when they do, that's when we'll see

you've found your voice in poetry.

Reviews

[Ayvid N]

Mija had such sadness, shame and fear in her and that makes for powerful poetry.
You sketch her with sublime strokes of emotion and empathy and in beautiful rhyming and meter.
"A crop of sorrow gathered there,
stored in your barn of inner pain." ~ I'm awed by these lines....Such awesome poetry!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you DIVYA. The film was awesome. If you get a chance and you don't mind sub titles, you won't be disappointed. Well worth viewing. Always appreciate your thoughtful reviews. Have aively day.

Chris

[Zoe Richardson]

To be a poet is to be a tortured soul. And yet, in that pain, we create incredible beauty with words. This poem is beautiful, as, I imagine, Mija's poem is.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Zoe for your thoughts. I appreciate your visit.

Chris

[Ada]

Nice piece that inspires while incorporating nature.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Ada. The Korean movie called Poetry inspired this piece. Well worth watching if you can cope with subtitles. All the best.

Chris.

[Laz K.]

Oh, I stumbled upon that film some time ago, and it left such an impression! Poetry can't make problems and difficulties go away, but it can make us bear them a little more easily. Also, we all need beauty in our life, regardless of race, ethnicity, age, sex, or religion. It's a great equalizer in life, and a force that unites many in a fragmented world.

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Laz, so pleased you saw Poetry. Yes, it left an impression on me too. Really like the thoughts
you have shared here. Thanking you for your visit. Have a good weekend.

Chris

[Amber Stone]

masterful poetry, Chris.
i make true bow, Madam, and kiss your blessed hand.
sincerely, Amber.

[Chris Shaw]

Aw Amber, you are such a sweetheart. Thank you for such encouragement.

Chris

[Davidgeo]

The line that says barn and pain is a clever way of saying brain.
You trade in relatively superficial ryhmes but, you're kinda creepy. The way you write has a more complex meaning.

I think, I could be wrong. I'm wrong about a lot of things. Frequently.

[Chris Shaw]

Well that's a first. No one has ever
said I'm kinda creepy before. I reckon that's a badge of honour :)

[Davidgeo]

I mean it in good way i promise. Doll face.

[Chris Shaw]

Ha! I believe you, thousands wouldn't :)

[Davidgeo]

I would never lie to you. And i don't mean you generally trade in anything, every poem you write I take as it's own, I'm sorry for making that comment seem general. I have high respect for you, you're as good as it gets on this site.

[Davidgeo]

You know I have a type of unconditional love for you... (almost unconditional, almost_

[Fran Marie]

One can feel the sadness within
these lines.. Mija with her crop
of sorrow gathered...

a well written
piece beautifully expressed

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Fran. The film and the character of Mija was very sad. That old lady had a plateful to deal with. Appreciate you checking in.

Chris

[Ken Simm.]

A superb idea. Superbly constructed with meaning.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Ken thank you always for your encouragement. Your lovely review hit the spot. Hope you are OK up there, over the border. All good wishes.

Chris

[Kim S.]

not sure who Mija is, I can feel this write you express yourself well. love the rhyme scheme

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you. She was the main character in the Korean film called Poetry. An elderly grandmother, with a load of problems on her plate. Excellent film, though it does have sub titles. Appreciate you stopping by.

Chris

[Kim S.]

no problem

[andrew mitchell]

Another enticing write Chris. Descriptive flow at its best.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Andrew for checking in. All the best.

Chris

[Throwing Romeo]

Stoped by for a read. Turned into
more. So i slowly went over your
words a few more times.
Each time it became more and more
my words. You know what i mean?
Thank you Chris Shaw,

Rossen.

[Chris Shaw]

I thank you for reading this poem more than once Rossen. The film is well worth watching.
read moreI thank you for reading this poem more than once Rossen. The film is well worth watching.

Chris