Absent Stars

And who has swept the stars away

not one remains in sight?

Too eager with their bristle brush

they've cleaned the sky at night.

So all those clustered gems I love

which give me peace of mind,

are huddled in an unknown place

that torchlight can not find.

A canvas stretches end to end

devoid of silver light.

The moon has left, those sparklers gone

will no one hear my plight?

If I should ask or make a wish

or plead for compromise,

will someone spare two tiny stars

and place them in my eyes?

Reviews

[Soren]

Taken literally, I too miss the stars. I remember when young going to the mountains with no outside light and seeing so many stars, now all gone due to light pollution. But figuratively, I feel that the present has taken the stars from our eyes with its form of light pollution. Nicely done Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Soren. I appreciate the thoughts you have shared here. All the best.

Chris

[Lorry]

Snap! I was just thinking along similar lines last night, except a little further north it looked like someone stole the sky and replaced it with a very low hanging,, black and angry supercloud, that was just waiting to burst.
Was it only august it was still light at 10pm? Its mot fair. No twinkles to watch, not even Mr Moon could barge his way through.:)
Roll on spring. :)
Beautifully written Chris, it sounded to me your words were spoken in a soft, pleading sigh.

Sigh :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Lorry. I was of course talking to myself and ever so quietly. Unfortunately in my household I am the only poetry lover and I believe they think I'm eccentric at best, nutty at worst. (lol)

Chris

[Lorry]

I used to describe myself in the about me section, as "as nutty as an explosion in a snickers factory." :)

[Chris Shaw]

Did you mention snickers? Well you would 't leave a snicker bar in my sight if you had any sense. I have to be rationed (lol)

[Lorry]

maybe thats where the nutty part comes from. Hey, maybe thats the secret of poetry, all poets eat snickers. Except the ones that we pretend have left they had nut allergies :)

[Chris Shaw]

I think you are on to something :))

[Lorry]

Which wood technically make snickers.poets ambrosia. Maybe I should buy some shares :)

[Fran Marie]

It's a bit sad to look up and see a starless night sky..but hopefully you'll find those stars again..your rhyme and rhythm is spot on ..nice work

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Fran Marie. They'll come out again when they are ready :)

Chris

[Nicole]

Wow...this is so beautiful...I loved reading it. Stars along with the moon are my very favorite things. I don't know what I would do if I looked up and they were all gone. I think we would be lost. Such a vivid picture painted and I love the last two lines.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Nicole, thank you so much for your response. Pleased to meet you.

Chris

[Nicole]

You're very welcome! Happy to meet you also!

[Dave]

Christine - like you I see the stars as signs of hope as well as beauty. I seldom go into the house before retiring for the evening without gazing at them. I am flustered only when the sky is overcast, but I'm content in knowing that they are still there, that I'll soon see them again. I really like your sentiment.

Take care - Dave

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Dave, yes star gazing is something we both have in common. Pleased you enjoyed this poem.

Chris

[Gee]

Booootiful, Bernard, booooooooteeeeeeful.
A joy to read this Christine. The rhythm of this is faultless

[Chris Shaw]

Well thank you kind sir, I really appreciate that. Looks like this may be one of my better writes. many thank yous Gee

Chris

[Gee]

My pleasure ( I've taken your hand in mine and kissed gently the back), tis a gem of a poem :)))

[Chris Shaw]

I have just curtsied to ya :)

[yourstruly]

i really like this poem! i love stars..i can't pick a particular sentence i like, its the whole poem! genius wording :) thanks for sharing this!

[Chris Shaw]

Well thank you so much for your glowing review. Really appreciate your visit and kind words. I'm a bit of a star gazer you know.

Chris

[Arriam]

Oh, my little heart is overjoyed. THis is vivid and yet simple and so many very good things. You're a remarkably talented writer and I am very fond of this piece.

Arriam

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Arriam, I am delighted you found pleasure in this little poem. Thank you for your vusit.

Chris

[Derekv]

Amazing work, Chris, I loved it. I wish I had your talent with words, they always seem to transport me into another world. Keep up the good work!

-Derekv

[Chris Shaw]

You are too generous Derek. Thank you kindly.

Chris

[Verse]

Awwww... that's lovely!!! This just calls out to the inner astronomer in me, and I'm sure many others.:):)
Feeling very starry eyed as I turn back beyond cyberlife.

V

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you V. Pleased I released the inner astronomer.

Chris

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Here borrow my crown cause you deserve to be the Queen for this beautiful sparkle!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for the loan Queenie, but that sparkler belongs to you :)