Dandelion Clocks

Separation sucks

Of all the homes that I have known

throughout my years of living,

there's one that draws me back in dreams

where thoughts are not forgiving.

For where the four lanes crossed I lived

with parents and four siblings.

While there contentment ruled my heart

though short it was in measure,

till circumstance dispersed us all,

too soon, too soon my pleasure.

For what I'd found, crushed in the ground,

was lost and gone forever.

A dandelion's seeded head

is wholesome to the eye,

yet when the seeds are blown apart,

excuse me but I'll cry.

So bittersweet that loving place

where pain is stitched to fine white lace.

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Chris… our Memories of growing up in big houses where Roses blushed… is always on our ❤️ Hearts.. Now the Angels brought us to a Cross roads to choose the Words that prepare the Journey we all must take eventually. Softly, Pat

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Pat. Pleased you stopped by to share your thoughts. Have a wonderful week.

read moreMany thanks Pat. Pleased you stopped by to share your thoughts. Have a wonderful week.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

I love the dandelions also. Here in Michigan. They grow everywhere. Sometimes a complete field of them. Good evening dear Chris and I enjoyed the story in the poetry. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[W. Barrett Munn]

Well presented in ballad meter with quite natural rhyme. Well done and a lovely read.

Winston

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Winston. Pleased you enjoyed your visit. All the best.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

So tenderly portrayed, yet quite sad when u dear certain conditions family separates, like birds flying to different nests, whatever the dire problem it brings tears to your eyes when you think about it, muse about it….I can relate to this somewhat Chris as my family scattered and me and my sibs hardly speak….not for lack of love, but so thing very strange…
Nicely penned my dear friend
Warmly, B

[Betty Hermelee]

Sorry for spelling errors!

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Betty. Not easy when the family scatters, particularly when you are still in your teens. I appreciate you.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

You're very welcome my friend, I can relate.
Warmly, B

[Andra Dare]

I love how the real becomes metaphor, in particular, the crossroads imagery. When families are blown apart, it changes the trajectory of one's fate (or feels that way). Thanks for sharing this tenderly haunted expression, Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Andra for your insightful review. Pleased you stopped by.

Chris

[MomzillaNC]

This is a tenderly melancholy reminiscence. It must be lovely to have such memories of childhood.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks for the warmth in your review. Pleased you stopped by.

Chris

[MomzillaNC]

yvw 😎

[Harmony Lee]

With this I reminisce upon my own childhood home that likewise "draws me back in dreams where thoughts are not forgiving". How bittersweet indeed it can be to love a place and its memorable journeys while simultaneously acknowledging its interwoven pains. I wish you well in your reflective healing should you so desire that, and I wish you well always.

[Chris Shaw]

I drove my brother back to our childhood home shortly before he died. It was a wonderful place, but sadly when I was 19 my parents moved. It split the family up far too soon. My three younger siblings moved with them, my brother and I stayed where our friends were and rented rooms locally. I wasn't ready for that, finding the split difficult. I was terribly homesick and didn't see my family very often for a while. Bitter sweet memories.

Thank you for reviewing.

Chris

[Harmony Lee]

In this way your family and house/home journeys seem a bit different from mine, although I can certainly understand what you express on in a conceptual and empathetic way. I know these splits can be difficult, both at the time and in a lasting way.

[Jimmy Yetts]

A lovely, and disturbing, piece of work.
But then, I guess, memories of past love--faded beauty--always hurt.
One poem, Chris, that will linger with this reader.

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Jimmy for giving this old poem an airing. Much appreciated.

Chris

[Aaron]

nicely written , lovely piece of work

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Aaron :)

[paperwizards]

This is a lovely piece of work, I really connected with the image you created here. I think houses that you grow up in will always have a special place in your memory!

[Chris Shaw]

Yes homes where I was brought up with my parents and siblings have a very special place in my heart. Thank you for your lovely review. I appreciate your visit

Chris