In Spirit

We are in time a mote of dust,

a pin prick in an ocean sky.

While some may catch the comet's flare,

each one of us is doomed to die.

What causes some to burn so bright

when most live out their lives in night?

I'd like to dance above the clouds,

do cartwheels over mountains high.

Chase rainbows to the valley's end

and grow two wings so I might fly.

These things I may not do on earth,

but will in spirit with re-birth.

Reviews

[Lorry]

Beautifully captured thought Chris, which leads me to wonder if we remove religion and personal beliefs from the equation for a moment, leads to the wonder that seems so primal and ingrained into our dna, of why we all have the feeling of being finally free of bodily form so intense, that it leads to another thought of this "life" being an audition for whatever it is I feel and you felt strongly enough t pen these words.
The thought does seem to lead us somewhere beyond faith and into realms unspoken, felt and known.
I wonder why we wonder such wonders, beneath a starless night sky where even the atmosphere of our own planet can cover these night jewels, how we still sense them there, waiting for us to unchain ourselves from our gravity obeying shells and see and be them without the need for eyes.
Now if you'll excuse me, I'll go back to counting twinkles before that big twinkle returns (the sun) ☀️😊☀️

[Chris Shaw]

Thoughts beyond faith, sort of grab me. I am not keen on organised religion Lorry. Thanks for your thoughtful review on an older poem, out for an airing. Your avatar is incredibly stunning. Tell me more about it please.

Chris

[Lorry]

Was taken 22th May 2016 and just came across it again. I think it was taken at Loch Lomond but from what side I knoweth not. I was thinking it will be my first jaunt out when the chaos of lock down easing settles down, around 2023 😊
Officially it is out of bounds but only because the many idjits who have headed there now the sun is out have made it a danger to life with people parking on the only road. Selfish ***** 😊
Its the second time it's happened that police towed all vehicles away yesterday again and locals cabs refused to take them the 70 odd miles to to the pound and closed all B&B's. The sane are rebelling and about flippin time 😊

[Chris Shaw]

The image is spectacular. You know there are nutters everywhere. Both sides of the border :)

[Lorry]

Yep, it's like an explosion in a snickers factory up here when the sun comes out to play. Nuts everywhere, but at least the squirrels will be happy 😊

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Chris... we will fly like Eagles over the Mountain tops and rest under the Shade of an Apple tree and recite poetry ...
some fine day. tenderly, Pat

[Chris Shaw]

What a wonderful thought Pat. That sounds truly wonderful dear poet. Many thank yous for checking in.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Whether or not we believe in re-birth, its doesn't matter as this poem is so true to many of us. It seems that we want to do and dream of joyful things before we die. You paint a fabulous write of these dreams many of us have....flying in the air with giant wings, climbing over mountains, chasing rainbows, all of which are fanciful, and even if we don't get to do them while on earth, we may, in "re-birth"
Well done Chris!
Best always, Betty

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Betty for sharing your lovely thoughts with me. You are very much appreciated.

Chris

[red93]

This so excellent Chris - your formal control over the subject - the unforced structure and rhyme scheme - so difficult to rhyme well these days with everyone writing free verse and spoken word material - this flows along very nicely, to an exceptional and meaningful conclusion.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much. An older poem out for an airing. Really appreciate your encouraging review.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! takes guts to take to flight doesn't it!? You creat a sharp contrast between V1 &2 .. lifts the joy in V2 well over that mountain .. I have flying dreams now and again .. my favorites! getting air born takes different shapes but always there is the flying .. ohhhhhhhhhhhh the flying. :)))) pity we see death as a doom ... I don't believe it for a minute .. we have the chance to kiss the sky as Hendrix put it .. without the psychedelic's please ;] dawn will be coming in a couple hours or so, here in the Ozarks ... mmmmmmmmm I anticipate a smooth take off
E.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Mr E. I sure hope you took to your wings and found yourself flying. You have mentioned music again and I know how important that is for you. Jimmy Hendrix was quite something. Another one who died too early.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

yes he did .. a unique, innovative artist for sure .. set a bar hard to reach in my opinion... yes..music is a big part of my life ... a secret to tell you .. I have a BA in Music as well as Nursing ;)))))))))))))) surprising how many in health care are also involved with music in some way or another. peace sister! and blessings galore!!! :)

[Melinda McQueen]

We can do so much in spirit... including dreaming.
I like this write.
Nicely done.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Melinda, I appreciate your visit. Am older poem out for an airing.

Chris

[mattavelli]

Hello, Christine! :)
This is a lovely rhyme.
"a pin prick in an ocean sky." - I like that, how you mix your metaphors.
Thanks for sharing.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much mattavelli. An old poem out for an airing.

Chris

[Lydia Shutter]

Wonderful images here. Indeed, we are all small compared to the enormity of the world, but I believe we all can burn bright in the here and now. Perhaps we will be given the opportunity to do those cartwheels after we die, but I am not making bets. I will do them now! Your words are lyrical, Chris....one of the best from you. Lydi**

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Lydi** for such an encouraging review. This is an older poem, out for an airing.read moreThank you so much Lydi** for such an encouraging review. This is an older poem, out for an airing.

Chris

[Dave]

What a wondrous dream. Notice I ignore your first phrase. It's so true and so sad. To be able to dance among the clouds and to do cartwheels on mountains and chase rainbows. What a delight it would be. Thank you Chris for this fantasy.
Take care - Dave

[Chris Shaw]

Many thank yous Dave. This is an older poem out for an airing. All good wishes. Have a lovely day.read moreMany thank yous Dave. This is an older poem out for an airing. All good wishes. Have a lovely day.

Chris

[Vertigo Cat1111]

You always write such beautiful, intricate, and breathtaking pieces. So spiritual and they always hit home. I can tell this was written from the depths of your soul and you put it on this website with the most beautiful words. This is one of my favorite pieces I've read and it truly feels as if you're floating on the words.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for that lovely review Colacat. Pleased you enjoyed this poem. Sort of reflects my spiritual beliefs.

Chris

[Poetic Beauty]

I felt like I was drifting on these words. I love that last two lines of this poem oh and imagery of the ocean sky. Stunning and creative

[Chris Shaw]

Thank so much PB for such an encouraging review. Much appreciated.

Chris

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome