In Spirit

We are in time a mote of dust,

a pin prick in an ocean sky.

While some may catch the comet's flare,

each one of us is doomed to die.

What causes some to burn so bright

when most live out their lives in night?

I'd like to dance above the clouds,

do cartwheels over mountains high.

Chase rainbows to the valley's end

and grow two wings so I might fly.

These things I may not do on earth,

but will in spirit with re-birth.

Reviews

[Lorry]

Beautifully captured thought Chris, which leads me to wonder if we remove religion and personal beliefs from the equation for a moment, leads to the wonder that seems so primal and ingrained into our dna, of why we all have the feeling of being finally free of bodily form so intense, that it leads to another thought of this "life" being an audition for whatever it is I feel and you felt strongly enough t pen these words.
The thought does seem to lead us somewhere beyond faith and into realms unspoken, felt and known.
I wonder why we wonder such wonders, beneath a starless night sky where even the atmosphere of our own planet can cover these night jewels, how we still sense them there, waiting for us to unchain ourselves from our gravity obeying shells and see and be them without the need for eyes.
Now if you'll excuse me, I'll go back to counting twinkles before that big twinkle returns (the sun) ☀️😊☀️

[Chris Shaw]

Thoughts beyond faith, sort of grab me. I am not keen on organised religion Lorry. Thanks for your thoughtful review on an older poem, out for an airing. Your avatar is incredibly stunning. Tell me more about it please.

Chris

[Lorry]

Was taken 22th May 2016 and just came across it again. I think it was taken at Loch Lomond but from what side I knoweth not. I was thinking it will be my first jaunt out when the chaos of lock down easing settles down, around 2023 😊
Officially it is out of bounds but only because the many idjits who have headed there now the sun is out have made it a danger to life with people parking on the only road. Selfish ***** 😊
Its the second time it's happened that police towed all vehicles away yesterday again and locals cabs refused to take them the 70 odd miles to to the pound and closed all B&B's. The sane are rebelling and about flippin time 😊

[Chris Shaw]

The image is spectacular. You know there are nutters everywhere. Both sides of the border :)

[Lorry]

Yep, it's like an explosion in a snickers factory up here when the sun comes out to play. Nuts everywhere, but at least the squirrels will be happy 😊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i wish i could tell those who feel they live their lives "in night"---
that they are special too...and meant something to more people than they could ever realize..

we all do cartwheels in our own way and time.

i really like this piece so much. I can feel it starting to inspire me to write something along the same vein...and makes me think of emily dickinson's "i am nobody, are you nobody too?"

j.

[Chris Shaw]

Starting to feel proud of this piece and flattered that you believe it could inspire you to write something along those lines too. Thank you Jacob.

[KeeD]

This is a such a beautiful concept. I wish to relive these words a thousand times. In terms of how you delivered the message, you truly are a gifted wordsmith. From the opener, I felt how humble and small we all are in the eventuality of things and how we wish to make an impact, not for some earthly pride or sense of recognition but that soul satisfaction is a term I'm going to use here. Your piece has indeed satisfied my mind and soul. Excellent stuff!

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Keegan, and thank you for calling on my work. Yes, this poem a little bit of spirituality for your mind and soul. Pleased it worked for you. We are indeed insignificant when it comes to time and space.

Chris

[lightsong]

I was thinking that I will tell You in my review what You've said in Your last two lines! the Spirit can do more than what we can imagine, but it's locked inside the body, when it's free let it be after death, or even when we develop a high degree in our spiritual consciousness and awareness, the real power of it will be released, lovely poem my friend with a great meaning, thank You for sharing it.

[Chris Shaw]

Here's to free spirits. Thank you so much for your kind review.

Chris

[Mrudula Rani]

I think all through your poetry not only you do dance above the clouds, do cart wheels over mountains high and chase rainbows to the Valley's end but also make your readers feel the experiences!

[Chris Shaw]

Then that makes me very happy indeed. Thank you so much.

Chris

[Mrudula Rani]

You are very welcome.

[Madeira]

Beautiful spiritual write, love the imagery!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for your kind words

Chris

[Re-Pete]

wow. wonderfully uplifting. i really appreciate the deep-spiritedness. our souls cannot be silenced. i can very much relate. excellent write. thank you for sharing this ... :)

"There is no value in life except what you choose to place upon it and no happiness in any place except what you bring to it yourself." - Thoreau

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Pete. I am always interested in your Thoreau quotations and I am thankful that you share them. The one you have left is an excellent example.

Chris