Sunset Cafe

A brisk breeze drives the crystalline,

while in the distance sail boats play

and sun spreads golden spangled light.

From high ground in a sheltered place,

I overlook white crested waves

which chase across the Weymouth bay.

By night, a full moon casts her spell,

fine threads of silver settle down

to glisten, silent on the sea.

Will he remember me next fall?

Will he recall, I was his all,

a rainbow in his Texan day?

Or like the tide that fickle turns

on footprints left behind in sand,

no trace of me, I'm washed away.

Reviews

[Soren]

Such beautiful images but such a melancholic feeling by the thought of being washed away. The initial lines so poetic.
"A brisk breeze drives the crystalline,
while in the distance sail boats play
and sun spreads golden spangled light."
"By night, a full moon casts her spell,
fine threads of silver settle down
to glisten, silent on the sea."
Sheer beauty Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Soren for seeing the beauty of Weymouth bay in this very old poem. Years later there is no need for melancholy, it was needless. I appreciate you.

Chris

[M. J. Smith]

Once, oh a long time ago, I rode with a Irish girl. I showed her my world and she spun tales at our nightly fires. As she would say, "Aye, 'twas a grand summer."
I never saw her again after fall came... Well, thank you for this lovely vision you have painted, Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

If I evoked memories of happy times, then I couldn't ask for more. Some romances aren't meant to last. Doesn't mean they weren't worth the effort though :) Pleased you stopped by MES.

Chris

[M. J. Smith]

You are a bright spot in my day. Happy New Year, my friend.

[Chris Shaw]

Aw, thank you :))

[Crowley]

I remember this!! I love the snappy rhymes and the way it lifts, hesitates and then hopes again. His loss if he moved on I would say. Good to see this again!

[Chris Shaw]

Good to see you Crowley and a special thank you for visiting this oldie a second time. Have been airing old stuff while having a break from writing. Happy New year. All the best for 2022.

[Einstein Noodle]

i am glad this old one is brought to the forefront to me ... what in the world is a Texan doing in Weymouth Bar tho? :))))))))))) you bring so much beauty, peace, setting and scene to me .. i would otherwise think of England most of chilly, foggy London from movies and books i have read ... being an old man i can look back on such summer flings of youth with appreciation .. tho hearts were broken ... youth is a fiery time and meant to burn i think .. we are fortunate to survive it eh!? love this poem ma'am! Happy New Year!
E.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Mr E, thank you for visiting this quite antique poem. So long ago I had almost forgotten, but thought it was worth an airing. It had some rust settled on it :) May I wish you dear friend a Happy New Year. Sending you every good wish from across the pond.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

[Chris Shaw]

:)) Happy New year's day Mr E.

[Einstein Noodle]

looks like my previous reply got the boot from the mystery gray box "X" .... at least i think that is what monitors comments that have smiles, hearts etc ... unless they are in between words .. anyway .. big smiles from me .. a pleasure to be knowing you too, Chrsi ... right here at the Cafe' ;) oooooo

[Chris Shaw]

Do you mean you were censored :)) They didn't like the emoji's. Find that funny when I think of what should have been censored on this site and what has been given a free reign :)

[Einstein Noodle]

:))))))))))))) i'm not certain the culprit ... but i do have strong suspicions it is that little grey X in the box .... i think it trims extraneous emojis or dots or non-verbal symbols that are at the end of a comment .. sometimes, i leave a review and the whole thing is poofed into who knows where .. minor stuff in the scheme of things tho isn't it?

[Chris Shaw]

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[MsJewel]

Such beautiful imagery in this well written poem. A pleasure to read :) Julie

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Julie. So pleased you enjoyed. I appreciate the visit.

Chris.

[Coyote Poetry]

We forget nothing that is so sweet and so beautiful.
"Will he remember me next fall?
Will he recall, I was his all,
a rainbow in his Texan day?"
I believe The Texan day won't never be forgotten. Thank you Christine for sharing the amazing poetry. I liked this one.
Coyote

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Coyote. Your kind words are appreciated.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure Christine and you are welcome.

[Mrudula Rani]

Your writing is absolutely beautiful and perfect in painting this poem.
The ocean of time can wash away so many precious memories, like foot prints on sand... a melancholic and a helpless sentiment to keep.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much for your generous review. I appreciate your comments very much.

Chris

[Mrudula Rani]

Pleasure is entirely mine.

[Nigel Newman]

Ah the perennial question. Will he/she remember/come back? Chris, this is beautiful. I mentioned elsewhere your sublime wording and flow. There's something I especially like about 'from high ground in a sheltered place', but I couldn't tell you exactly what, except that it says so much - sheltered in more than one sense, for example, perhaps weatherise, financial, emotionally, status, etc. I also like the way you're not afraid to leave out words and let the reader join the dots sometimes. It's obvious what 'no trace of me' needs as some introductory preposition or whatever, so if it's obvious why have it when its inclusion might dilute the feeling. So well done for that. You also show that using everyday words, and not reporting to contrived mouthfuls, can be so fun of pictures when used well and with feeling.

I have to confess that on first reading I wasn't sure about the fall/recall/all. On reflection I quite like it and it would lend itself to being the bridge in a song because of its sudden change of style.

BRs Nigel

[Nigel Newman]

I hate autotype. weathwerwise (mea culpa) resorting full of pictures !!!

[Chris Shaw]

Hello again Nigel. So pleased you were tempted to read another. I quite often use internal rhyme. I mostly write rhyme and metered poetry. The one you read earlier, not my usual poetry, just experimenting. I do write in simple language, I am not one to get the thesaurus out each time I compose a poem, and I do enjoy creating strong imagery. I thank you so much for your kind reviews, and am sending a friend request. Hope that is ok.

Chris

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I truly enjoyed this read. It was wistful and romantic in the artistic sense of the word. Quite lovely. Thank you for sharing.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Fabian, pleased to meet you. I enjoy your poetry too.

Chris

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Pleased to meet you as well. :)

[sette]

i really like how this poem is written so emotional yet with clear images to ponder and visualize on

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you sette. Pleased you got something from it.

Chris

[sette]

my pleasure