Nothing's more fetchingly lovely than a maiden faire with daisies in her hair.
Delightfully rendered, Christine, in Ballad form that flows and dances in sweet rhythms and the smoothness of spot-on syntax up off the page into our hearts from this wonderful tale of daisies in Eirwen's honor.
Consequently, Eirwen is a lovely name in my ancestral Welsh language … one is left to wonder whom your Eirwen might be to inspire such a sweet composition.
Brings to mind a poem from my own pen you might enjoy, too:
"Daisies" http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/RichardJ/1937821/
This one made me swoon from its sheer moment in gentle grace in homage to Eirwen and one of Nature's sweetest flowers … thank you for the happy, tender feelings I love so dearly! ⁓ Richard : )
(L1, consider "I well recall the games once played" to bring it into count, and V2 L1, add "t" to "Bur") I'm too picky, some say … LOL!
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6 Years Ago
Dear Richard, thank you so much for reviewing another of my poems. Your assistance with critique is .. read moreDear Richard, thank you so much for reviewing another of my poems. Your assistance with critique is greatly appreciated, and I don't mind in the least. It's all in the detail, I say. Eirwen was the mother of two friends who happened to be twins. And Eirwen was indeed Welsh. I wrote this after she died. Your input appreciated.
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Now, what a sissy you'll think me to know my eyes welled and brimmed … diolch yn fawr, Christine.<.. read moreNow, what a sissy you'll think me to know my eyes welled and brimmed … diolch yn fawr, Christine.
You're one of the few who actually use my critique … it makes my input feel valid …thank you, Christine.
I well remember a meadow where my cousins and i played in childhood, and of course yes we made daisy chains, and we made whistles by blowing grass blades between out thumbs ..what wonderful times they were ...childhood at its best :)
This certainly has the ‘Ahhh’ factor - poetically nostalgic and anecdotal in nature. The imagery, the subject matter and stanza flow makes this a pleasure to read … excellent! P.S. The name Eirwen means: "white snow" from the Welsh elements eira "snow" and gwen "white, blessed". - :-)
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Thank you Phill, especially for advising what the name Eirwen means in Welsh. White snow, that is be.. read moreThank you Phill, especially for advising what the name Eirwen means in Welsh. White snow, that is beautiful and quite apt for the daisy as well.
Sort of remember my sisters making perfume with flowers.
Though I do remember daisy chains.
No chance of the daises being disturbed now, kids would have to google daisy chains.
Do kids have fun now.?
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Yeah, they havre fun with their cyberfriends, on instagram, or snapchat. Some even venture out into .. read moreYeah, they havre fun with their cyberfriends, on instagram, or snapchat. Some even venture out into the fresh air (my grandchildren live with me, so talking from experience) but daisy chains, making perfume, paper chains at Christmas? Nope.
Absolutely gorgeous. Your rhyming was so effortless and flowed with a wonderful combination of maturity and wonder. I am astonished by your ability to keep a steady meter and still have the poem sound so natural. The descriptions of the daisies and how you would create crowns prompted lovely memories of my own childhood and picking daisies with my sister. From the morning dew, to their “fresh white skirts,” the daisies came alive in my mind with your imagery and diction. Eirwen’s kind and delicate thoughts deserve to be heard by all and rooted into all of our heads.
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6 Years Ago
So happy you enjoyed this poem, and even more so because it took you on a journey back in time. Plea.. read moreSo happy you enjoyed this poem, and even more so because it took you on a journey back in time. Pleased to meet you here Kalea.
.......I have no words, my voice is in my awe! Marvellously constructed, and brilliantly executed! I was taken by the hand and drifted through the world! Much enjoyed! Well done!
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What a review emipoemi, I am blushing. Thank you so much and pleased to meet you.
Nothing's more fetchingly lovely than a maiden faire with daisies in her hair.
Delightfully rendered, Christine, in Ballad form that flows and dances in sweet rhythms and the smoothness of spot-on syntax up off the page into our hearts from this wonderful tale of daisies in Eirwen's honor.
Consequently, Eirwen is a lovely name in my ancestral Welsh language … one is left to wonder whom your Eirwen might be to inspire such a sweet composition.
Brings to mind a poem from my own pen you might enjoy, too:
"Daisies" http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/RichardJ/1937821/
This one made me swoon from its sheer moment in gentle grace in homage to Eirwen and one of Nature's sweetest flowers … thank you for the happy, tender feelings I love so dearly! ⁓ Richard : )
(L1, consider "I well recall the games once played" to bring it into count, and V2 L1, add "t" to "Bur") I'm too picky, some say … LOL!
Posted 6 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
6 Years Ago
Dear Richard, thank you so much for reviewing another of my poems. Your assistance with critique is .. read moreDear Richard, thank you so much for reviewing another of my poems. Your assistance with critique is greatly appreciated, and I don't mind in the least. It's all in the detail, I say. Eirwen was the mother of two friends who happened to be twins. And Eirwen was indeed Welsh. I wrote this after she died. Your input appreciated.
6 Years Ago
Now, what a sissy you'll think me to know my eyes welled and brimmed … diolch yn fawr, Christine.<.. read moreNow, what a sissy you'll think me to know my eyes welled and brimmed … diolch yn fawr, Christine.
You're one of the few who actually use my critique … it makes my input feel valid …thank you, Christine.
Albert, my paternal grandfather introduced me to Tennyson when I was nine. I have loved poetry ever since but did not attempt writing a single piece until I was 40. It's never too late to try somethin.. more..