Flightpath

Playing with haiku

Lunar reflections

shimmer on ocean's dark cloak,

flightpath to heaven

Reviews

[Neville]

these are never easy, but you make them seem so disproportionally so :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you for your kindness Neville. They actually require quite a bit of thought even though they look random.

Chris

[Devansh Shekhar Shukla]

On reading this beautifully written poem, I remember one of my favourite hindi poems. It's start has the same meaning as that of your poem! Great lines..

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much Devansh for your very encouraging review. All good wishes.

Chris

[Roger Turgeon]

Finally a first class seat. I think I'm going to just recline, have a drink and enjoy the view

[Chris Shaw]

You do that Roger. I am appreciating your visits. Thank you :)

Chris

[Roger Turgeon]

Eh... was just strolling the beach and saw your blanket

[Stella Armour]

just seen this and was going to say what a lovely haiku when i realized i had already commented on it... and still is a lovely haiku :)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Stella for coming back for a second read. Very much appreciated :)

Chris

[john l smith]

Yes, this is a little jewel
the full moons reflection, on a crystal clear evening, coming across the dark water, certainly is spectacular all the more rewarding because of the infrequency

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Dave. Pleased you enjoyed the imagery in this one. It was beautiful to witness.
read moreThank you Dave. Pleased you enjoyed the imagery in this one. It was beautiful to witness.

Chris

[Jimmy Yetts]

Dynamite haiku!
Stunning imagery, Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Jimmy. Pleased you enjoyed the imagery. It was spectacular when I witnessed it.
read moreThank you Jimmy. Pleased you enjoyed the imagery. It was spectacular when I witnessed it.

Chris

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Flightpath'
Christine Anne Shaw,
This poem holds a living reality played out in Heaven's domain above. The spirit is pulled by it's tantalyzing reality which plays out and is processed within. The title is good and it shows the theme and place of action for your writing. I like that. This Haiku is so lovely and has a rise and fall- a musical feel to it. 'Lunar reflections' shining above and felt by the heart. 'shimmer ocean's dark cloak,' I love how the the canopy of clouds meets the sea and they blend and seem as one. 'flight path to heaven' yes the message is one of looking beyond oneself and finding beauty to feed one's need within.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Kathy

Chris

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Chris,
This was a joy to read. So much meaning packed into a sweet little poem.
Blessings

[Stella Armour]

Not many poets can write a good haiku , but this one is beautiful in its imagery Chris ..:)

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Stella. It helped that I witnessed it:)) Phew this heat. It's scorchio outside

read moreThank you Stella. It helped that I witnessed it:)) Phew this heat. It's scorchio outside

Chris

[Stella Armour]

Too hot outside, and freezing inside for me, my house gets no sunshine when the trees are in full leaf; bring on autumn...i love autumn :)

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To me sounds like something beautiful tranquil like the sun shining of a morning in a cloud that burst in rays :)

[Chris Shaw]

It can be whatever you want it to be Jon. For me it was the image of moonlight, forming a pathway on the sea. It was heavenly indeed.

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I know that's the beauty of poetry:) yours sounds pretty awesome as well but I haven't been around an ocean enough to know that beauty but I'd like to have.

[Chris Shaw]

You would remember it if you had seen it. Something I will never forget. You take care Jon

[CutlerStark]

This was a great Haiku and thank you for giving me love on my poem too

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much. You are most welcome

Chris