To Light the Darkness

To save your soul from silent black skies

You must paint the dark with your fire and

light the stars with the song of the universe you lie under.

 

Take in the words that dance off your lips,

Breathe the calling of your essence,

Taste your fire cracking in the night.

 

Forget the shrieks echoing in the evenings black-tinted air,

Focus on the light that hums from the embers of the moon,

the beat of a flower’s petals tangoing with the wind,

the melody of how a bird’s wings flutter during flight.

 

The last beat is that of which comes from fellow man,

the tune of friends walking with you during the day,

the soothing whisper of a lover in your arms,

and the mysterious call of strangers in unexplored shadows.

 

If you let your heart listen to the music,

then the lyrics will become a part of you  

and you will be a part of everything that sings.

The fires of the world will burn with you as one 

with the vivid passion of a sweet rising sun.

Reviews

[Tracie D'Angelo]

You have such an amazing gift for writing in a way that's so descriptive and full. Reading your work is an experience of feelings and it builds a momentary, twirling world. Another nice piece!

[Sarah Jane]

I love it. the kast stanza, really really good Wonderful write :)

[SoLongAndThanksForAllTh..]

This poem seems to have a very inspirational theme. To me it seems to be a blue print for living a purposeful and complete life.

I think the strongest part of this poem is the first stanza and the image of that you must, "paint the dark with your fire". It's written almost as a challenge to those of us who might prefer to shuffle through life in a state of self-generated insignificance.

There's similar strength in the third stanza which seems to be a warning not to succumb to the nay-sayers in the world. The "shrieks echoing in the evenings black-tinted air" could be read as being those of our own insecurities or the negative howls of those around us. It works very well interpreted in either way.
Equally the call for friendship and camaraderie which is quite apparent in the fourth stanza.

My only slightly critical comment of this poem is the mix of senses used in this poem. The title "To Light the Darkness" is wll matched initially with very visual motifs such as painting and lighting but this changes as the poem continues to focus only on auditory word such as whispering, calling and singing. If the initial theme were kept up so that the theme consistently matched the opening and title I think it might make the poem a little stronger.

Despite this minor gripe though this poem managed to give me something of an inspirational lift so well written!

[Daydreamer54]

beautiful [poetic write! I especially like the last stanza! Awesome job! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

"Take in the words that dance off your lips,
Breathe the calling of your essence,
Taste your fire cracking in the night"
So many strong lines in this poem. I like the logic and the feel of your words. Complete poem is very good. I like the positive ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[smalltownsympathies]

This wasn't my favorite, but still, great writing.

[Angela Mulley]

This is lovely, great poem!

[Arsenic Nemesis]

Very well structured and written, the progression in this piece is marvelous, I loved it. Keep up the good work~

[Richard Williams]

It's uplifting and positive, well-written with good and vivid references. The first three lines capture us right away with Betelgeuse-like pull.

[G. K. Bostic]

This poem just keeps getting better as it goes along. I especially loved the lines,

"If you let your heart listen to the music,
then the lyrics will become a part of you
and you will be a part of everything that sings."

But the impact of those words would not have been such without that which preceded it. Another line that resonated for me was,

"the beat of a flower’s petals tangoing with the wind,
the melody of how a bird’s wings flutter during flight."
Oh, okay, that's two lines. ;)
Great write and much enjoyed!!