Set the Sea

Waves sway and strut, rolling

endlessly towards me, painting

my mind with awe- but oh Sea,

I long to escape the beauty of

your currents sway, to forget

the turquoise shade of shallow

shores, be unable to recall the

vivid hue that shines in the sky

as the world sends her light to

sleep; for while the Sea dreams,

my mind lies awake, staring at

the gait of glistening waves.

 

Salty Sea, why do my thoughts

drift with your flow? For I do not

know why when I gaze into your

meadows, the desire to gallop on

the unknown flutters fiercely

within me. My stunning Sea, if

only I were not consumed by the

beat of your song, then maybe I

could be soothed by the bland tune

of man. If my heart were to rise

from your bed, then I could embark

down the roads that lie ahead

paved far from your shores.

 

I wish I had no memory of the

Sea and the way that it gleams.

I want to have never admired

the passionate tango between

wave and wind. I want nothing

more then to be blind to these

streams shinning under a sky

tinted with the shimmer of the

sun, to not know of clouds shaded

with the bounce of birds’ wings

joyfully seeking the blossom

of spring, while I lie underneath, 

longing wildly to be free.

Reviews

[JelliFyshKissUs]

Is it the seas hold on you>>>or your hold on the sea?>> The question plagues me as I read this tranquil expression of obsession that chains you to the shore>> We wish to be ignorant of the sea and all its glinting glory, but we have stared so long that the freedom of naivety long escapes us>> Oh, you have set my mind on a rampage>>>and I shall contemplate the fate of this sea-gazer>>

[Jordan]

Loving the consonance with all the s's. Honestly, this poem is fine how it is; I can't really think of anything that I would change.

[Marie Harrison]

I love poems about the sea. This is marvelous!

[John Stussy]

Such a sight as the relentless sea, always free and simultaneously tranquil and roiling, can instill strong emotions and admiration in many people. Personally I long to start my own sailing business, if I somehow gain a TON of money. That's besides the point however. Your imagery and descriptions brought this piece to vivid life. Indeed it was pretty much flawless. The only point I can possibly see some improvement on wuld be working on your meter. However after reading the poem a second time through the way you patterned your words fit the way waves and currents shift and shape into one another. If that was your intention, superb job. If not, superb job anyways, this poem is headed to my favorites!

[Rossen]

The pulse of the planet beating on the shores of the salty sea...

[Star Wolf]

Wow, very impressive! Love the images your words painting along with the sad lonely tones of your poem.

[Richard Williams]

This is so nice, you paint such a fine picture of the sea and waves and freedom in the flow of things, a very nice read.

[Mauricio Montoya]

I’ve spent many a time at the beach, gathering my thoughts, good, bad Happy and sad so I can relate to this piece I like how you brought this together.
Excellent write.

[KAREN]

Well written! The poem pulled me into an sea of gloom, felt some what sad! The imagery was great!