Widdershins

Superstition can backfire on you...

Widdershins

 

“... two ... three!”  Three times around the crumpled gum wrapper, counter clockwise.  She continued down the sidewalk and hoped nothing else would appear.   Bad luck to by-pass objects in your path without circling widdershins, three times.  Her granny told her that and she believed it.  Better to be late than sorry and she was never sorry.  She was, however, very often late, three jobs this month, but she was lucky and always quickly found another job.

 

She entered the small gift shop and encountered a young woman leaving.  Startled, the woman dropped her keys.  She quickly circled the keys three times, widdershins, picked them up and handed them to the bewildered woman.  She rushed to the back room, Mrs. Doyle right on her heels.

 

“You must stop!  You’re scaring the customers.”

 

 “But, Granny says "“

 

“I Don’t care what your crazy old Granny says.  You’re late again.  Once more, and I will have to let you go.”  Mrs. Doyle softened.  “Child, I’m superstitious, too, but you go too far.  Get up front,  I have an appointment and must go now.”

 

The next morning, the gum wrapper had been replaced with a styrofoam cup.   Three laps around the small piece of rubbish, quickly, but as luck would have it, she encountered a crumpled cigarette pack and a sleeping dog.

 

Mrs. Doyle was talking on the phone when she slipped in the front door,  and gave her a stern look. She walked to the back room and Mrs. Doyle soon followed.  “I’m sorry.  I have to let you go.”  She held out an envelope.  “Here’s your paycheck.”

 

She walked home slowly, the sidewalk obstacle-free.  Nearly home, she heard children laughing and looked up.  A teen-aged girl with four small children, boisterous and loud, were coming her direction.   The children ran around the young girl, screaming with delight.  Two broke free and ran between two parked cars into the street. 

 

She raced toward the children when she saw the large brown van.   The fire hydrant, not in her path on the sidewalk,  was now directly in front of her.  With no thought but of the endangered children,  she jumped over the hydrant, into the street and grabbed the two children up.  She turned to hand them to the crying teen, stepped back between the parked cars as the van’s driver slammed his brakes.  The rear of the van skidded to the side, crashed into the rear of the first parked car, pushed it forward with a tremendous force and  trapped her between the two cars.   She heard her hips crunch, the bones in her thighs cracked loudly.

 

As she lost consciousness, she looked up to see the fire hydrant and heard a child counting as she circled it    “... two... three!  Grandma says you always have to circle stuff in your way widdershins, that means different from the clock,  three times or terrible bad luck will find you.”

 

Author's Note

Sam, you were right. Skidded it is-ed.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What a story, a unique story, Carol, so finely written, start to finish. (I'd even accept whatever you use for skiddesting!) You have a slightly off-sense of the real but ridiculous. But believe me, intelligently so, words set just so, with fine punctuation, etc. Also, here you add mystery, local folk-lore and that beautiful word: 'Widdershins ' Thank you for sharing every word... :)

[Macciola]

Wish Mrs. Doyle listened to Granny. Poor protag, she was trying! :( Great piece about superstition, Carol

[Stella Armour]

wonderfully thought out and written, i must make sure not to pass superstitions on to my grandchildren lol ( well not widdershins anyway)

[genocide]

great storytelling great sentence structure

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Born storyteller
You are great

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Whaaaaa? "Widdershins" is a superstition I've never heard of before. Good thing though, because I'd have been fired from many jobs too! Suspenseful, well-written story with a jolt of a surprise ending. Should have listened to Granny?? Hmmmmm.....

[ElbecanC]

I was interested from the start, which is rare for me. I usually have to read for a but to get interested. Solid peice of work.

[Maria]

This was very unique, in itself, at first, it seemed laughable, and in the end, it was like, oh man, her Granny was right, but she did save the lives of two kids. as well. Great writing

[Carol Cashes]

Thanks. My first attempt at Flash Fiction. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Maria]

Yeah, it was really great and very thrilling as well.

[Nelson E. Rolon]

My lord, that's a haunting tale. But I like it, a lot, especially because the tagline for the story, "Superstition can backfire on you," takes on new meaning after reading.

[Carol Cashes]

Thank you for reading this. It was one of those midnight inspirations that wrote itself, and my first attempt at Flash Fiction.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Grandmas are never wrong.
Still, heroism is heroism; got a feeling God will ultimately make things right.
Fascinating tale!

[Carol Cashes]

I love that you see the "karma" coming through for a superstitious girl. Thank you for reading this little offering.