Awake

A poem about not being able to sleep

Counting the minutes
Those that mean the most
The hours spent thinking through
The troubles that aren't any less

The voices whisper in the dark
To the tune of the noisy larks
Asking who's to blame and
"Am I going insane?"

Nobody seems to answer
Or nobody seems to know
Either way she still asks
Waiting patiently for the verdict

Look at the beauty of the sky
That's always taken for granted in day
Those birds calling
Music to undistracted ears

But what else can be done?
With these night terrors
Just wait in the hope that minds can be mended?
Or sit and listen intently as the night clatters

The cause was once so hard to envision
But now it all makes sense
This was only a catalyst
Used to speed up
A deadly reaction;

She can feel it in her bones

Breaking down,
Disintegrating,
One by one,
And
Little by little.

Author's Note

Let me know what you think :) x

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Definitely superb, you capture the essence of impassioned nighttime thoughts that inhabit your imagination when you are unable to speak, the final whispering of a mind on the verge of rest but isn't quite there yet. At first, I was perplexed as to the bland and consistent tone of this piece, but after a second reading I've found it fits your speaker's mindset perfectly. Well done.

[Shaquana Adams]

But what else can be done?
With these night terrors

Sleep trouble can be the worst. I like the way you depicted it here, especially that night terror part. Great write Michelle! ^-^
-QuanaWana

[caseymichelle31]

Yeah, I know. I get a lot of them and I guess it helps to write about them...Thanks so much for reading and reviewing :)

[Brittany Zedalis]

This is really awesome. I love how you took not being able to sleep and made it into such a marvelous poem.

[caseymichelle31]

Thank you! :D

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write. Thank you for penning...:).........................

[caseymichelle31]

Thank you very much! Thanks for the review :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...................