Nineteen

A poem I wrote for a competition for the Road Safety Authority

Nineteen Springs
From the day of his birth,
His fate had been caused
By his own carelessness

Nineteen Summers
Did he even give a damn?
He looked super cool
The inconsiderate fool

Nineteen Autumns
The glass covers the streets
Innocent tears pollute the air
How could that possibly be fair?

Nineteen Winters
Their graves so new
It could have been stopped
Slow down

That's all you had to do.

Author's Note

Let me know what you think

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Poignant portrayal of the dangers on the road without road safety, and the early death it could bring upon to those that are ignorant to the safety measures of the road. The message you express is like a slap in the face, considering that he dies when he was only 19. Fine poem!

[caseymichelle31]

Oh wow thank you very much! Glad you enjoyed :)

[Brittany Zedalis]

This nearly made me cry. I was in a horrific accident in 2010 and I still have nightmares about it. Great job with this.

[caseymichelle31]

Aw I'm so sorry. That must have been horrible. Thank you :) x

[Rick Stassi]

A gut-wrenching, different way to use seasons in conjunction with a lifetime. Very nice and definitely poignant.

[caseymichelle31]

Thank you very much :)

[paddy d daly]

an important message and so well stated, your idea of using the seasons is really good, best of luck in the rsa competition...

[caseymichelle31]

Thanks for reading! :)

[paddy d daly]

you're welcome.

[Frieda P]

Good message here, it kind of smacks you upside the head which makes it better. Sad thought....did you win the competition?

[caseymichelle31]

I haven't actually entered it yet, I have to show it to my English teacher tomorrow so she can enter it. Yeah, sometimes I think reckless drivers need that smack though or else they'll never learn. Thanks for taking time to read it :)

[Frieda P]

Good luck, I think you have a great chance of winning. :-)

[Stefanie Holmes]

Certainly a message many people need to hear. The amount of careless driving nowadays could so easily be prevented... if only people would just take the time and slow down... it saves lives.

~Stefanie

[caseymichelle31]

Yeah I think so too. It's so horrible when innocent lives are ended by others thinking they own the road. Yes, exactly! Thanks for reading :)

[Tina Louise UK]

Profound piece, I lost a friend many years ago due to careless driving. An important message hun, well penned :) x

[caseymichelle31]

Aw I'm sorry. Thank you, that's the intention :)