Chain Smoking

Chain Smoking

A Poem by Daniel Washington

Running free through silver gates
abandoning life and things I create
facing the unthinkable cost

Sleep is a dream that I see when I wake
as I shiver and sweat, and shrug off the aches
this chain-smoking life is wearing me down

More heroes then ever, yet villains prevail
it's not the old, but the young that are frail
every lesson learned, is another discomfort

Perversions and diversions, drugs and dirt 
my blocked and battered lungs are beginning to hurt
And I've never been so aware that I'm alive

But it isn't a nice, uplifting high
it's the acidic rain that falls from the sky 
With each test, another part's demise

Delusional, frantic, misunderstood
a reincarnation of Burroughs would be good
My concentration wanes - I need a smoke

© 2015 Daniel Washington


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This line "as I shiver and sweat, and shrug off the aches" I think the "as" should be taken off since you say it in the previous line, it would flow better in my opinion. Other than that, beautiful flow and nice word choice. I enjoyed this thoroughly

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Daniel Washington

9 Years Ago

Thanks for the kind words. I do agree, the "as" repetition is a bit sloppy, but I think I'd rather r.. read more
Sydney

9 Years Ago

Ah i see. Good choice

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Daniel Washington
Daniel Washington

Milton Keynes, United Kingdom



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Hello! I'm Daniel; - I like to write. Sometimes I do it well, other times I don't, which I suppose is only fair. For the past 5 or so years I've been working on a novel. Currently only at novella l.. more..

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