Does he know that my heart is fearless but my mind is not?
Does he know that with the ease of his hands each touch each movement caressing my body
each muscle each inch each surrounding molecule he knocked down my impenetrable wall.
For hours he liquefied my soul molding my skin beneath his hands. Fiending for that feeling to never stop he gained entrance to my secret garden. Where he tended to each and every flower like a master gardener until every petal yearned for his touch.
Wow...maybe HE knows I hope he does if not you need to tell him. This
is great reminds me of a friend of mines poem! it's short but it packs a
punch like a story. Lots of detail your metaphors are on point and
the flow of this piece is makes everything polished and fluid. Very nice!
I enjoyed it honestly
Whoa wee. This is definitely an intimate look at the inside of your heart, or who ever you maybe writing this about. Fantastic feeling, emotion completely high, and I felt that lost feeling reading it.
Great write!
Strong writing, as usual. Beautifully written; passionate, fiery, intense; and, also, very deeply touching. Terribly honest/utterly revealing/displaying deep down 'hidden' truths...so that the reader feels rather like being a highly privileged voyeur looking in!
When I read your stuff...my only reaction is, wow, completely blow my mind...truly, can't ever get enough of this...and, honestly, just can't wait to get to read more...hurry up...gimme LOADS of it, quick! ;-)
Very vivid account. I like your description and I almost can here your voice as I read this piece. I love the desperation in the voice of the subject. Great write and I plan to read more.....
his man sounds like one in a thousands shot of being genuine, aside from his touch. love the way you implied how he tended all your flowers and kept you growing.
Such few words yet such power! The reviews can only repeat what I would say. This is a fine write. When your feelings are expressed there is no right or wrong. Sounds like a response piece to me? I think the original idea is out there somewhere? -smile-
Its so beautiful and tender way to tell the world how you feel, how he make you feel , his voice not heard here, but your loving is shuted with such a beautiful way, you played with the words so gentel, the love making is part of your relationship, part of your love... I hope he knows, I am sure he will... Yossi
You may be a reader and I suspect you are a comprehensive reader but I know of a FACT is that you are a POET!
This my dear talent is sensational!
I was anticipating every moment!
AND if he don't know shame on him! (wink)
I am a thirty-nine year old female public servant. I enjoy reading and writing poetry. I think I like reading it a little more. Poetry is my therapy!!! more..