Love with the sea

erm just random poem feed back would be nice if you find it rubbish or needs improvement feel free say

Our love no longer exists as look into your deep ocean eyes.

All I see is world full of hate through your deep ocean eyes .

As you scrunch up the letter in your watery hand all I see through your deep ocean eyes is anger building up into a stormy sea.

As your tears swirls, crashing down my face mixed with my tear drops all I hear roaring   sound of your sea like eyes looking upon me with spite.

As you try drowning me in your sea like eyes, I  slowly can no longer swim in these waves.

I’m nearly at bottom of your tears swirling around so many currents I think how am I going survive..... nearly given up.

Suddenly the storm of the sea is calm and your deep ocean eyes are bright blue  again as I softly hear  a faint echo of seagulls in the distance in rhythm with your heart getting louder like mine .

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[koty bell]

incredible best ive read in a while ur very talented great work