Hey Beautiful

Love and rejection

I see you sitting there in your chair
wondering if you know im here too.
I see your face and your beautiful hair
wanting to say hello to you.

      you sit there looking like a dream
      and making me want to kiss you.
      not realizing we could be a great team, 
      so for now i'll have to miss you.

             all my life i wanted to say hey beautiful
             but didn't have the guts too.
             so for now i stay invisible
             and remain waiting for you.

                    I have been here all along 
                    and have always loved you.
                    I even wrote you a song
                    I'll never sing to you.

                            I've been here waiting and wondering
                            and I believe it has been too long.
                            I can no longer wait for what tomorrow will bring
                            maybe I was wrong.

                                       all my life i wanted to say hey beautiful
                                       but didn't have the guts too.
                                       but i will no longer stay invisible
                                       or remain waiting for you.

Reviews

[R. Nella]

Update 20100504...

After discussing the poem with the author, it is apparent the lack of a clear path, either to say something or give up, is a deliberate reflection of a decision to be made.

My use of the word 'Lust' to describe the poem was thought to be negative, which was not my intent. I actually quite like this work. My own views on love, and what I personally require to distinguish lust from love, caused me to give it that label.

Original review...

I would say this poem is about lust, and fear of rejection, rather than love and rejection.

I'm not one to base relationships purely on physical attributes, but I can relate this to past experiences. To me it's not clear if the intention is to no longer stay invisible by expressing your feelings and seeing if it leads anywhere, or to give up all hope and move on. The latter, which is I think what you probably meant, isn't something one can simply do.

[Coyote Poetry]

Fear can keep us from grand adventures and someone very big disappointments. Take no chances. Have no fun. I like the feel and the emotion of this poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote