Our Universe

Something out of my comfort zone. (Rhymes, R.I.P)

When our eyes first met,

A spark flared.

It was for but a moment,

And it, abandoned,

Knew not of itself.

Three days followed

And again, our eyes met

And that spark flared anew.

A universe, we noticed,

Bloomed with life.

We met again many times,

Giving spark to our universe,

The one made of us and us of it.

We gave it life,

It gave us life.

We promised to never leave,

Never again, abandon,

So our universe can never die,

Always know love

And teach us how to love,

The right way,

The true way.

Reviews

[LauraraMonique]

Well, this is going to get quoted again because it truly is perfect.

"Three days followed
And again, our eyes met
And that spark flared anew.
A universe, we noticed,
Bloomed with life"

It reminded me of the first time I laid eyes on my husband. This was very visual and well thought out. I can see why you're a writer. I hope you always continue to follow that dream. You can inspire millions.

Best,

laura.productions

[Alexander D]

Thanks for the review and praise. I'm glad you could connect with it.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

"
Three days followed
And again, our eyes met
And that spark flared anew.
A universe, we noticed,
Bloomed with life" - This is truly magical, made me smile very beautiful.

Overall a simple yet very deep piece, full of love, care, responsibility and meaning one of your best Alexander keep it up - ATC

[Alexander D]

I'm glad my first excursion out of my "Rhyme" comfort zone wasn't in vain.
Thanks for the awesome review and praise, I'm glad you like it.
I'll try to keep it up.