The Sole Sathraelite

Pertaining to 'Brink and Romy' of 'The Legacy of Sathrael' saga.

Poette Arde'mon Poh - The Sole Sathraelite

Smoke fills the sky, ash falls to blood.

A wife cries out; a father has gone.

Steel strikes bone, a head rolls in mud.

A son cries out; a mother has gone.

Cinders burn hot, a lifeless body burns.

A baby cries out; a brother has gone.

Spears rain down, a platoon falls prey.

A saviour cries out "The baby is saved"

Castle walls crumble, soldiers flood in.

Brandishing swords, they commit a grave sin.

Blood paints the streets, golden eyes turn dull.

Running for their lives, they'll remember Sathrael.

The baby disappears, into a void he goes.

But he will live on and forget all his woes.

Twenty years will pass, the boy now a man.

He will find out the truth, and strike at Enochan

His people avenged, their souls now at rest.

His life will go on, to live, love and jest.

But it won't be the end of these tragic tales

War is a constant and it never fails.

Author's Note

This probably won't make complete sense.
The great seer, Arga's prophecy, retold by the poet Arde'mon Poh.

Reviews

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

"But he will live on, and forget all his woes." - comma or "and" not both

"War is a constant, and it never fails." same as above.

Much better layout the rhyming strategy was very effective and the flow was consistent in rhythm. A very tragic melancholic piece well written, thanks for sharing and thank you for changing the layout sorry to be a pain about it!

[Alexander D]

Thanks for the review and the tips, and sorry about the previous layout; I have to keep in mind that writing like that may be too confusing for some people.

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

I'm sorry I'm dyslexic I can't read this I don't know whether it is supposed to read down or across or what the whole thing makes my mind spazzle.

[Alexander D]

How about now?