Shoreline Shadows

Written on a picture prompt not so keen on this one, something doesn't sit right with it.

The child's hands grew colder with time

the grip a little looser

His fingers seemed to slip away

and fade with a ghostly whiteness

No longer did his cries bring joy to the room 

his playful shrieks merely distant echoes on the breeze

Not even a whimper or cry left his stone cold frame

The world was silent now

His parents cried the color from there eyes

streams and rainbows, lakes and oceans

There shoulders sunk much heavier

Haunted by the spirits of love deceased

He reached for them from beneath the waves

like a whisper from the spray

A fragmented form of matter

dancing in shadows around them

No longer could they hold him 

embrace his little head

his soul had slipped through fragile cracks

falling away from the world of the living

The child's eyes bright light put out

cast darkness through there lives

A creaking omen soon began to leech

Draining them of there shattered minds

They held each other close as life signs faded

there years wept out in mournful hours

They two tumbled away sucked peacefully into the abyss

But there shadows stay and dance on the shore of the sea

The boys hands grow warmer

His parents grip tight

mere spectre's that glitter in the shadows of the night

A family of illusions that skip through the shore

Reviews

[Keith]

Based on the prompt, this is a very good write. Its heaviness matches perfectly with that of the picture.
The last passage threw me. I don't know if the couple were real and their feelings an illusion. Or, they were all an illusion.

Just a couple spelling problems to fix:
His parents cried the color from there (their)eyes
Draining them of there (their)shattered minds

All in all I did enjoy reading it so, well done.

[Dr. Wood ?]

I think you sort of lose it towards the end, quite easy to do...Go back to it in a couple of weeks and you may be able to sort it out.....Very SAD though....Very sad

[Owlgirl]

Nice flow and well worded, great poem and is very thought provoking. I like how it tells a story.