cant do this without you

I messed up i suppose..but now im left thinking... what am i supposed to do without you in my life

Im breaking in so many places, torn down by your words. Seperated shattered, i need you but you dont want to listen anymore you nolonger care. Im just a needy little girl you nolonger love. My paper heart ripped in two , throw in a fire to burn to ashes. I want you to hold me like you used to , just tell me that it was all a game and that in the morning ill forget those words you said.

Just f**k off and leave me alone completely you said were done. No friendship, no casual aquantiens simple an abrupt. Not hesitation in your words, only clear cut and precise. Ill never hear your voice again, never see you smile cause to you i have become nothing.  So easily done for you blocked and deleted from msn, no x's no goodbye just a simple i just dont f*****g care anymore.

You are my best friend the one person i confided everything in and now your gone.. turned away from me like i was the plauge removing any ties you have with me, deleting me from facebook as if i was never there.My comments on your page blown away like water. Water like the tears fighting to fall from my eyes, but ill fight them back i wont let them fall. Not this tiem because i dont want to be that weak.

You told me to stop being pathetic and get my life together without you. But i cant because my life was very much centered around you and now your gone. Well whats left just this empty sinking feeling in my stomach. The empty sinking feeling i had until i met you. I still love you all this time no matter all the things you've done to me, and i dont even kno why its not like you have been nice to me these few days but i cant help myself.

This feeling is like being shredded over and over again, puncture wounds upon my delicate frame, tearing me into chunks of emotionless rubble. I need you , i need you to come back to me, please please dont hate me. I kno im sorry that i cant just let you go i cant just let you be happy unless your holding my hand. But i do honestly love you, so what can i say. The stupid things we do for love, the stupid stupid things we put ourselves thru just to show that we want and care for you. But ive gone to far by simply being me, by simply existing i pushed you away and now you cant stand my face, my voice. Now you have removed every memory of me, and what can i do? Sit here and cry cause you will never listen.

Reviews

I've been hesitant to review your stories because they're so emotional and I wasn't sure if my usual picking apart of spelling and grammatical errors would seem inappropriate for such heartfelt writing. However, I'll do it anyway because you could write some great stories if you just knew how to do some things.

"Im" should be spelt as "I'm". I noticed this quite regularly. Apostrophes in cases like this are to show contractions of words. "I'm" is a contraction of "I am", which you were probably already aware of. Here are other ones you misspelled that fall under the same category: "dont" should be "don't", "ill" (as in "I will", not the word for being unwell) should be "I'll", "wont" (as in "will not") should be "won't", "cant" should be "can't", "whats" should be "what's". There might be more, but those are the ones I could find when reading over your story again.

Don't forget that words like "I", "I'm" and "I'll" should always have the "I" as a captial letter.

You used the wrong "your/you're" in this section: "and now your gone". You should use "you're" instead, and that's the same for: "your holding my hand". I this section: "why its not like you" you should have used "it's" (a contraction for "it is"). The one you used is for ownership. For example: "The door hangs on its hinges."

You should spell "tiem" as "time", though that may have just been a typo, "kno" needs to be "know". "Seperated" should be spelt as "Separated".

That's all those kinds of errors I could spot. Once you clear those up, the story will look much better. They're little things, but they can mean a lot.

Good luck with your writing, and keep going. Thanks for your review.