The perfect couple

A couple forever joined by there love, created for each other and destroyed together

The perfect couple

hands intwined

standing side by side

forever in there wedding attire

never do they speak a word

to eachother or any soul

but there love wil last forever

no quarrels , no fights

a flawless realtionship

he will never raise a hand

and she will never hurt him

he wont ever leave her side

and she will never leave his

they stand together

forever

on top a weddng cake

there sucess

based on the gentle truth

they never talk

and never will they ever

have to look into each others eyes

the perfect candy couple

Author's Note

hmmm.. im not to keen on this piece

Reviews

[Olivia Carmine]

I know what you mean about not being too keen on it-- I think it's because everybody has fights, and this sort of implies more of a desperate wish than a prediction of the truth. It seems to show that they're having problems but are trying to keep them under wraps and that everyone else thinks they're the perfect 'candy couple' as you say. (Candy couple could also refer to the marzipan couple on a cake.)
There's also the thing about them never talking, which isn't a good idea, as all relationships are based on communication.

Which I think might be the opposite of what you wanted to imply. Sorry about the review, because I know it'll cut.

[Twilight]

Although you may not like this piece, Cappi, some of the thoughts and values which you express, seem to be very worthy. Indeed, it's nice to see that some people still appreciate romance!

Now, on the negative side, you appear to be describing something, which could never be? But, I am sure that you know this. On the otherhand, this piece does indicate that you value and understand, what often makes or breaks a serious relationship. There are also a few blatantly impossible ideas, which a woman might dream about! For example, the idea of a wedding day which is endless! That's the implication of line four, the way I interpret it.

"He won't ever leave her side and she will never leave his". These words show, that the writer values loyalty in a relationship!

As a poem, this does not really flow too well. But, as I suggested earlier, it's references to some worthy values (which are often not appreciated today), make it a worthy piece of writing! Thankyou, Cappi, for sharing this with us, and adding it to my Group!

[Orlando Murcia]

It is very creative though
you might not find it that
appealing but I thought it was
really cute

Nice work!

Love your creativity

Orlando M

[Bryce Simonds]

I thought this piece was creative. I also think that it goes against reality, and is based more on hopes and dreams, but there is nothing wrong with that at all. Hopes and dreams are what get us through the day =). There's one problem I picked out in the poem.
"but there love wil last forever" It's just a typo, you spelled "will" wrong, that's all. Other than that good write, thanks for sharing.
-Bryce
P.S. Thanks for your review, that story just needed to be written.

[Kyronn Shurriah]

Absolutely brilliantttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttt!!!!!

[BrightEyes]

I disagree - I rather like this piece. The flow seems to break a bit with the line "on top a wedding cake" and thereafter but that is easily fixed. There is more than one way to take this piece - a sardonic take on the plastic so-called perfect couple - ones that never have anything to say to one another, and no real emotion between them, so no need for heartfelt glances. Yes, the relationship might last - but how miserable are the two involved there?

There is also the other side. One disheartened by past relationships and thinking that perhaps if one does not speak, then no arguments can occur. Two living their lives together - yet forever apart in reality.

Either way it was intended - this is a piece I enjoyed.