A watery grave

The waters are murky but inviting,

 a common friend .. 

a delicate and cautious dip in the cooling depths. 

Floating endlessly on a stream 

drifting un-noticed past the waters edge. 

Taken on a journey willingly unaware of the waiting demons,

 the captivating .. 

desperation for a difference sending you down the watery path. 

I lay there embracing such a gentle soul,

carrying me away from tortured thoughts , 

possesing me with soft restraints. 

Perhaps I merely floated too far 

carried away on endless streams 

to a lost spot in discarded seas.

Stranded in the thoughts of a lunatic,

 confied to the asylum of tormented mind. 

Maybe i drowned somewhere beneath the thoughts

 in the lakes of the forgotten. 

Drowned by my own minds eye. 

Taken in all my glory to a death by my own hand

Reviews

[Devons]

An intriguingly dark imagining with a perceptive sense of the introspective. The reader almost feels as though he has been told a story but what has really been communicated is a meaning, perhaps a warning... A prognosis for the troubled soul.
"What is this world if full of care
we have no time to stand and stare?"
...Perhaps we can stand too long.

[Martin Alexander O'lear..]

nice use of imagery ama :)

[Baby Ricochet]

"Stranded in the thoughts of a lunatic" THat's great

[writingcrazy55555]

Line 12, It's supposed to be: "Perhaps I floated TOO far." The "i" has to be capitalized, and also, there are two "O's" in "too" when you use it in that specific context. And the line 4th from the end, the "i" should also be capitalized. Just to let you know :P
But great poem, descriptive, well-written, and fluid. Nice write! Excellent job, love your work! :)

[Pax]

a watery grave in the lakes of the forgotten. i really like it. great imagery used, a sad and dark tone to it.

[Ama May Cooper]

Thank you for another positive review, im glad you enjoy my work.
:)