Distant Desperation For Greater Intervention

I miss you

Halfway across the world

slipping through the fragile cracks of existence

so far out of my reach 

I can feel you fading away 

feel our withering connection

A deep untouchable sleep I can't disturb

This possibility you'll never wake

This heart wrenching feeling ill never see you again

No more late night phone calls

A time difference morphing your days to my nights

Your lips permanentally sealed shut

words of wisdom locked away from eager ears

Such sudden degeneration 

And what if you return a stranger?

Our memories torn from your mind

My childhood affections scattered to the wind

My admiration for a sentimental farther figure

Merely bran cells damaged beyond repair

I spoke to you hours before

All smiles and false assurances

A joke of undiscovered injury's

A false sense of security to your uncertain survival

Wires and machines the only life left to a lifeless body

I plead with a god I don't believe in 

Begging consideration for your soul to remain

For some strained recognition

An un-predicted recovery 

Don't let the light go out just yet

I need you, I miss you, Halfway across the world

Reviews

[Pax]

heartfelt words are always the best. the way you express it is simply
beautiful..

"Flip every bad into an optimism to strive for the better."

[Baby Ricochet]

This speaks to me, it screams at me. My wife could have wrote this when I was deployed.

[Ama May Cooper]

It was orginally written for a family friend who is like a farther to me, who recently fell into a coma but lives half way across the world... but i can see the reasons behind your idea aswell.

Thank you so much for your views and ideas it is wonderful to see that my piece can mean something different to a different person who reads it.

[Brittany]

I'm reading two different type of loss here...the loss of the physical proximity and also the loss of life.

I like the lines: I plead with a god I don't believe in

Begging consideration for your soul to remain

[Ama May Cooper]

You got my meaning spot on, im very glad you understood the two different representations. :) thank you so much for your review.

[Crazy Cat Man]

Ugh. Long distance relationships sucks. and it sucks when someone u want to be close to is far away. I felt the same way when my cousin and her baby moved back to south america. i miss them. we had so much fun. but they are with my heart always :)

great piece